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Just Needed Sometimes
Isn't it time that we shake off the rust
and fuck like rabbits until we bust
no regard for the clothes we wear
in every sense leaving us completely bare
then start building a connection supreme
so inspiring and transcending even dreams
discovering an identity not to be torn
impervious to any outside scorn
the sweetest of responses engulfed in love
a fit so easy like a hand and glove
time that we go there and have no regrets
maturity's influence makes this a safe bet
and fuck like rabbits until we bust
no regard for the clothes we wear
in every sense leaving us completely bare
then start building a connection supreme
so inspiring and transcending even dreams
discovering an identity not to be torn
impervious to any outside scorn
the sweetest of responses engulfed in love
a fit so easy like a hand and glove
time that we go there and have no regrets
maturity's influence makes this a safe bet
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Re: Just Needed Sometimes
21st Jun 2015 3:05pm
Safe to say that maturity speaks for itself, therefore; giving way to the possibility of things not needed to be spoken.. Ted I really enjoyed this read. Its so good to see the "relaxed" yet intense side of you.. Beautifully written
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21st Jun 2015 3:20pm
Re: Just Needed Sometimes
Anonymous
21st Jun 2015 11:15pm
"impervious to any outside scorn"
^^^^^^
nailed it!...
... i'll have two of whatever you're having, smoothjazz
^^^^^^
nailed it!...
... i'll have two of whatever you're having, smoothjazz
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re: Re: Just Needed Sometimes
22nd Jun 2015 3:25am
Laugh- strongest thing I drink is milk with kahlua or a pina colada!
Thanks for the read.
Thanks for the read.
Re: Just Needed Sometimes
22nd Jun 2015 00:38am
Incredible sentiment, just being yourself, doing what you enjoy, no judgments, no scorn, a safe haven called love. I love this poem. And great flow!
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re: Re: Just Needed Sometimes
22nd Jun 2015 3:27am
thanks the kind comments may actually prompt me to share it with the person who inspired the writing!
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22nd Jun 2015 9:30am
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Re: Just Needed cm
22nd Jun 2015 9:53pm
living in the now-grabbing the bull-hope she goes for it!!!
purposeful time- in perfect pen!!!
purposeful time- in perfect pen!!!
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23rd Jun 2015 1:02am
Re: Just Needed Sometimes
28th Jun 2015 00:39am
Nicely done. I have read it about 10 times and each time it conjures up good memories for me. I will be smiling the rest of the day....Thanks for sharing!!
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28th Jun 2015 1:12am
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24th Aug 2015 11:13pm
Re: Re. Just Needed Sometimes
Thanks; I have no idea where that came from---maybe it can be attributed to the fact that my high school was the Jackrabbits.