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I climb then i fall
I build then it collpases
I work so hard only to fail
I love so much only to be hurt
Its only better if everyone leaves
Then theres no one for me to dissapoint
&
No one to hurt me
No more its so painfull
All im doing is making people think im happy im not
I just wanna die
I cant handle this no more
I build then it collpases
I work so hard only to fail
I love so much only to be hurt
Its only better if everyone leaves
Then theres no one for me to dissapoint
&
No one to hurt me
No more its so painfull
All im doing is making people think im happy im not
I just wanna die
I cant handle this no more
Published 22nd May 2011
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22nd May 2011 3:36am
This poems good,but might I suggest in the last line make it 'any more' instead of 'no more', I think that makes it flow better,but its your call.
22nd May 2011 7:52pm
thnx i need some help with this im new to it all so anything u say itll really help
