Clean my Bedroom

I think you've made the right decision Virginia.  Getting fed up is necessary for good health this time around.  There's always someone cleaner to take his place whenever you're ready.  You deserve the best!

Thank you, Crow, though I am not sure how deserving I am.

Virginiapetal, Emotional evictions are cathartic, but I'll be damned if they don't kick one more hole in the wall as they exit. Great poem.

Wonderful comment.  I will have the Spackle in hand....

"But before you leave
Take a moment
To put the milk back in the fridge
And wash a pan or two
Because you’ve left a big mess…."

this everyday little scene makes the poem feel more real. well done.

Thank you, Minivera.  Too real to be untrue.  

True, nice write.

Thanks for the read-and comment.  

Tidy world, tidy brain

I like how there is a natural caesura at the end of line 8 which emphasises "Egos". Like the rest of it too, I just noticed the pause though. M

I enjoyed the way you cleaned this up.

wow, so great ^^
Very much enjoyed, and felt the emotions well :-)

Love this. Strong symbolism and associations. The first part actually reminds me of a past girlfriend that had this little twin bed we would sleep on. It was lifted up on cinder blocks to make more storage space underneath. I tried to talk to her into getting a bigger bed because I would end up jammed up against the wall every night. She never did though, even after I fell out of it in the middle of the night one night. I am not being poetic, I fell off her raised up bed one night.

Anyway, I like the casual story creating here, and the symbolism of cleaning up the mess he made and keeping the lock of dirty hair.

Great write.

spring cleaning & open windows to let fresh air in. beds can be confining when the occupants only use it for sleeping...

Sentiments of a common occurrence. Hardest part is getting them out. Been there! Nice one Ms.Petal. Felt it.

sometimes being a cleaner and cleaning house is necessary and for many well overdue - it's amazing what we can get used to or put up with - that's not living it's simply ploding.

excellent write I hope cleaning give you sparkle

:-)

tender pain...

I'm contrite...

I've only just read this
and I love it...

I wouldn't advise walking around
with dirty hair in your pocket, mind..:)