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I wish
I wish I knew my family better,
I wish I knew those who actually cared for me better,
now I am here, lying on a bed in a dull white room as my body slowly fails me,
you don't visit, nobody visits I asked for you to come I asked and pleaded and begged but you were to busy,
you were off doing something else with me in the farthest reaches of your mind.
I sent you a message yesterday,
today is my last day alive,
last day to see anyone but nobody came,
do you remember the promise you made,
you promised you would never leave me alone,
you would never let me die alone,
SO where are you now in my last moments of life,
you broke your promise,
you never intended to keep them,
did you?, DID YOU?
Guess not, the voices that used to have names were right,
your just a liar, that's all you will ever be.
I wish I knew those who actually cared for me better,
now I am here, lying on a bed in a dull white room as my body slowly fails me,
you don't visit, nobody visits I asked for you to come I asked and pleaded and begged but you were to busy,
you were off doing something else with me in the farthest reaches of your mind.
I sent you a message yesterday,
today is my last day alive,
last day to see anyone but nobody came,
do you remember the promise you made,
you promised you would never leave me alone,
you would never let me die alone,
SO where are you now in my last moments of life,
you broke your promise,
you never intended to keep them,
did you?, DID YOU?
Guess not, the voices that used to have names were right,
your just a liar, that's all you will ever be.
Published 18th Apr 2015
| Edited 4th Jun 2015
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Anonymous
18th Apr 2015 6:38am
This has a kind of eerie haunted feel to it. A chilling voice of the dark. It is a good piece.
My only advice is that if you would write it as a poem, it`s effect would be stronger.
Good one!
My only advice is that if you would write it as a poem, it`s effect would be stronger.
Good one!
Thank you, sometimes it's hard for me to get the correct structure for the poem.
Anonymous
18th Apr 2015 10:01am
It can be so, but however it is most about WHAT you write, write on!
