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Seeds
She looked over at him,
her gentle eyes projected a tender and fragile heart,
"Maybe it's time that you stop looking for the storm,
enjoy the sun,
and handle the rain when it comes to feed the flowers"
He was humbled by her seeds of perseverance,
and allowed the words to take root in his soul.
"Let them grow, let them live, let them love."
her gentle eyes projected a tender and fragile heart,
"Maybe it's time that you stop looking for the storm,
enjoy the sun,
and handle the rain when it comes to feed the flowers"
He was humbled by her seeds of perseverance,
and allowed the words to take root in his soul.
"Let them grow, let them live, let them love."
Published 14th Apr 2015
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14th Apr 2015 10:54pm
15th Apr 2015 5:03am
16th Apr 2015 10:03pm
A truly beautiful and delicate poem Preston....
my only suggestion would be to remove the word 'that' in the third line...
the voice of an old poet bellows in my head
'get rid of that's, and's, & the's in your writing...you don't always need them...' & I don't always succeed...lol...
my only suggestion would be to remove the word 'that' in the third line...
the voice of an old poet bellows in my head
'get rid of that's, and's, & the's in your writing...you don't always need them...' & I don't always succeed...lol...
17th Apr 2015 00:08am
Thank you so much for your feedback!
Originally, I actually did not have "that" in there lol.
I am, however, addicted to the over-usage* of all said culprits.
Room to grow on my part ;)
Thank you for your words of encouragement :)
XOXO
Originally, I actually did not have "that" in there lol.
I am, however, addicted to the over-usage* of all said culprits.
Room to grow on my part ;)
Thank you for your words of encouragement :)
XOXO
