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Is it my turn?
How strange
Oh how strange
Like me
Just like you
Well how long
How long
Has it been one,one hundred years
You've been gone
You see me in the ceiling
Close your eyes and come to life
A shadow, to shed some light
Is it my turn to rescue you this time?
Oh how strange
Like me
Just like you
Well how long
How long
Has it been one,one hundred years
You've been gone
You see me in the ceiling
Close your eyes and come to life
A shadow, to shed some light
Is it my turn to rescue you this time?
Published 14th Nov 2009
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14th Nov 2009 00:46am
I like the short lines and repetition in the first two stanzas, and independently I like the final stanza, but I'm not sure they fit quite right together. I don't know, something seems a little off in the transition. Otherwise, it's very good.
16th Nov 2009 10:01pm
