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Lion
Ease me into Zion
Funneling into gentle pillows
Lowered down by braided strawberry
blonde vines
Fast asleep in a cradle
Suspended safely
Musical
Echos
Hovering past the budding field of cactus
Published 14th May 2011
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Anonymous
14th May 2011 7:58am
Beautiful! I like the length of it. Makes every word count for more. The last line is perfect.
14th May 2011 6:33pm
Is excelent!
The title threw me a little and what follows is an unexpected surprise. . Beautiful.. Much like you
The title threw me a little and what follows is an unexpected surprise. . Beautiful.. Much like you
14th May 2011 8:10pm
15th May 2011 4:19pm
cactus should be cacti but thats not as pretty so maybe cactus field instead of field of cacti. er.
i really liked the title. i really think the imagery is quite symbolic and really does a nice job of creating suggestions to the meaning of the piece. it feels serene and nostalgic in a way. awesome work
i really liked the title. i really think the imagery is quite symbolic and really does a nice job of creating suggestions to the meaning of the piece. it feels serene and nostalgic in a way. awesome work
