deepundergroundpoetry.com
Tirade
Always been tenuous,
Sometimes querulous,
Malaise descending over face,
It was not a docile task
Surfeit amount of violence,
And succinct explanation.
Rebuke thoughts
Tryin' to be rapacious
Ever bother its ramification
Witches being mercurial
Could mollify the anger,
But souls are moribund,
Too plebian to digest.
Sometimes querulous,
Malaise descending over face,
It was not a docile task
Surfeit amount of violence,
And succinct explanation.
Rebuke thoughts
Tryin' to be rapacious
Ever bother its ramification
Witches being mercurial
Could mollify the anger,
But souls are moribund,
Too plebian to digest.
Published 15th Mar 2015
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 1
reading list entries 0
comments 2
reads 800
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
17th Mar 2015 5:17pm
McJay, you've got a fine vocabulary, and always include some of my favorite words. I do think, though, that the word choice could be more accessible, and more effective. I would simply say "too pedestrian" to digest, rather than "plebian" (which is really spelled "plebeian"). High caliber words have more power when used sparingly. They can be disruptive in overabundance. But I do love a good tirade!
17th Mar 2015 5:19pm
Thanks for the honest critique and lovely insights you provide everytime.Thanks crowfly.
mcjay
mcjay
