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Became
And so I became;
as my individuality I did let slip away,
feeling neither the weight of distance or time
between
And so we became
friends to be lovers
with nothing between
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Re: Became
20th Dec 2014 9:04am
"Friends to be lovers
With nothing between"
I like these lines,very puzzling to find friends who broke the boundaries to become lovers and yet with nothing in between. Nice and precise! Good write.
With nothing between"
I like these lines,very puzzling to find friends who broke the boundaries to become lovers and yet with nothing in between. Nice and precise! Good write.
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re: Re: Became
20th Dec 2014 10:24am
Re: Became
20th Dec 2014 11:00am
And so we became
friends to be lovers
with nothing between
... It's always wonderful when there are no barriers
friends to be lovers
with nothing between
... It's always wonderful when there are no barriers
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re: Re: Became
20th Dec 2014 2:48pm
Re: Became
20th Dec 2014 4:14pm
I take it that individuality is a worthwhile sacrifice in this process of becoming. Take yourself, a lover, stir well, and see what happens.
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re: Re: Became
20th Dec 2014 7:02pm
It's about re~finding individuality alongside
togetherness of friendship found and a love to
discover
togetherness of friendship found and a love to
discover
re: Re: Became
20th Dec 2014 7:03pm
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21st Dec 2014 3:50pm
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21st Dec 2014 3:57pm
Re: Became
Anonymous
21st Dec 2014 5:10pm
Rose,
Wow! Now that's a tight space :-) Enjoyed!
tornado
Wow! Now that's a tight space :-) Enjoyed!
tornado

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21st Dec 2014 6:41pm
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Re: Became
24th Dec 2014 1:40pm
Yes it reminds me of that intimacy we all desire, to slip away from ourselves and all time and space ceases to be as we are lifted up into a realm beyond this world, all of our cares cease to be and we breath as one love together.
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re: Re: Became
24th Dec 2014 3:03pm
yes perfect description and wonderful commenting
thankyou.
though to find such intimacy without having to slip away on imaginative thought is what we crave above all else, though seldom is it achieved, most of us go on searching or just give in to the idea that it truly doesn't exist.
I for one know it's out there.
thankyou.
though to find such intimacy without having to slip away on imaginative thought is what we crave above all else, though seldom is it achieved, most of us go on searching or just give in to the idea that it truly doesn't exist.
I for one know it's out there.