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Not mine - Quadrilogy of Senryu
You’re my mother tongue
My skin, my bones, and my flesh
You’re my comfort zone
You’re my open mind
My folly of love, my guide
You’re my equipoise
You’re my blessedness
My muse, my rose and my thorn
My balancing act
You'll be my sorrow
My sore heart's piercing arrow
My fake tomorrow
My skin, my bones, and my flesh
You’re my comfort zone
You’re my open mind
My folly of love, my guide
You’re my equipoise
You’re my blessedness
My muse, my rose and my thorn
My balancing act
You'll be my sorrow
My sore heart's piercing arrow
My fake tomorrow
Published 18th Dec 2014
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18th Dec 2014 9:02pm
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25th Dec 2014 4:17pm
Read the title, mind the rest :-).
Thanks a lot, dear Gabriel!
The French word is especially for you!
Thanks a lot, dear Gabriel!
The French word is especially for you!
18th Dec 2014 10:44pm
so sad that today's joy becomes the misery of a not too distant dawn. reflective poetry, Chi...
25th Dec 2014 4:20pm
One must celebrate when on has the chance. Embracing good times means to have to embrace bad times, too.
Kind comment, John. Thank you :-).
Kind comment, John. Thank you :-).
18th Dec 2014 11:27pm
the anticipation of loss whilst
still experiencing the joy, such
is the stuff of life...
oh well, life is but a
library book,
before you take it back
make sure you're done
with it..:)
still experiencing the joy, such
is the stuff of life...
oh well, life is but a
library book,
before you take it back
make sure you're done
with it..:)
25th Dec 2014 4:21pm
Always good for a deep and witty comment you are, dear Paul!
So let's enjoy the present and don't worry about the future!
So let's enjoy the present and don't worry about the future!
20th Dec 2014 11:42am
There are so many wonderful dynamics portrayed in this ... Each verse could stand on it's own but the fact that you've linked them like a renku is great!
Loved the last two stanzas most. "fake tomorrow" ... Yes I'll move on but I'll be the worse for it.
Brilliant!
Loved the last two stanzas most. "fake tomorrow" ... Yes I'll move on but I'll be the worse for it.
Brilliant!
25th Dec 2014 4:26pm
Glad and happy you liked it since
your mastery relating to haiku/senryu is
unsurpassed and very much admired!
Thank you, LSP!
your mastery relating to haiku/senryu is
unsurpassed and very much admired!
Thank you, LSP!
21st Dec 2014 2:49am
25th Dec 2014 4:27pm
1st Jan 2015 8:22pm
I love this quadrilogy!
And the word "equipoise", which sound as an old french word, but it's not ! Except poise is an unit which comes from an old french unit!
And the word "equipoise", which sound as an old french word, but it's not ! Except poise is an unit which comes from an old french unit!
4th Jan 2015 11:08am
Thanks a lot, malin! Happy you like it! Yes, equipoise sounds French and is a compound of Latin aequi- (equal) + Old French pois (weight), which derived from Latin pendere (to weigh). Interesting how words make it into language use ...
7th Jan 2015 3:05am
I really enjoyed reading this collection. This is elegant and twirling lightness in ink, balanced by quiet wisdom.
12th Jan 2015 10:09pm
Thank you so much, Tristique, when writing my haiku I let my heart speak. Glad you enjoyed it!
11th Jan 2015 10:28am
This poem makes reflect on conversation with my Current husband. I've been married twice. Widowed from my first. The greatest gift my husband could give me is to let me die first. The last verse of this poem is something I hope to never feel again.
I know what you mean. When we love we can't bear to be left behind. This would be my darkest nightmare, too. But I know that it would devastate my husband to be left behind. I can't bear the thought either ...
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