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The Circus
Welcome, welcome, boys and girls to
The greatest show you'll ever see.
This man is insane; please push to get in,
Ten percent off per wicked grin,
Fifteen for every deadly sin,
This man is here for the devil within.
Come watch, come watch, now don't delay
The gun at his head ain't got all day,
This is his first and only stay,
Please, everybody, right this way.
See that look upon his face?
From eyes to ears? That's pure disgrace!
His trembling lips can sense the taste
Of a soon-to-come bloody embrace.
This is the new entertainment
Brains for blood for lives for payment.
The greatest show you'll ever see.
This man is insane; please push to get in,
Ten percent off per wicked grin,
Fifteen for every deadly sin,
This man is here for the devil within.
Come watch, come watch, now don't delay
The gun at his head ain't got all day,
This is his first and only stay,
Please, everybody, right this way.
See that look upon his face?
From eyes to ears? That's pure disgrace!
His trembling lips can sense the taste
Of a soon-to-come bloody embrace.
This is the new entertainment
Brains for blood for lives for payment.
Published 8th Nov 2009
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8th Nov 2009 2:33pm
That is rather disturbing, but really well done. The second stanza is my favourite, I think, though the whole poem is good.
The only thing that makes me pause is the line "of a soon-to-come bloody embrace", just because the syllables/rhythm don't match up with the rest of the verse.
Very minor detail in an otherwise well structured and written piece! :) Thanks for sharing it.
The only thing that makes me pause is the line "of a soon-to-come bloody embrace", just because the syllables/rhythm don't match up with the rest of the verse.
Very minor detail in an otherwise well structured and written piece! :) Thanks for sharing it.
8th Nov 2009 10:13pm
Your poem magnifies the way that the exhibition of other peoples' suffering has become such a mainstay of entertainment on TV and elsewhere.
The rhythm and diction of the poet sugest the patter of a fairground berker very effectively, adde]ing to the poem's satircal force. well done.
The rhythm and diction of the poet sugest the patter of a fairground berker very effectively, adde]ing to the poem's satircal force. well done.
9th Nov 2009 1:11am
10th Nov 2009 5:14pm
And it's so true how sick society really is when it comes to these things.
12th Nov 2009 00:50am
23rd Nov 2009 4:37pm
The first word that came to mind when I read this was 'disgusting'. And I stick by it because I think, or at least my interpretation of your poem is how f*cked up the world has become and how mankinds means of entertainment are actually what is disgraceful as opposed to "that look upon his face". I love the message coming across through this poem, it's so powerful. I also love the fact that the rhythm of your poem is completely in tune to a circus theme tune. That could just be the way I read it though. A truly astounding piece, one of my favourites by far.
Anonymous
23rd Nov 2009 4:55pm
so much raw pain in this as there is a brave revealing of our times.brilliant words.
23rd Nov 2009 8:08pm
A good for nothing, hands down, feet up well done for this one. As I always mention my rhyming complex before stating this, but I can't often even consider rhyming poetry, this, however, is sensational.
