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Screaming
Screaming at the top of my lungs
Trying to let out the pain
Nothing works
The darkness is moving in on me
There's no way out in your arms
Your love is killing me
The falseness in your words wrap around my neck
The hate that came from love has now won
Trying to let out the pain
Nothing works
The darkness is moving in on me
There's no way out in your arms
Your love is killing me
The falseness in your words wrap around my neck
The hate that came from love has now won
Published 8th Dec 2014
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12th Dec 2014 3:22am
Not the strongest read in the world, not gonna lie, it was kinda cliché, and the story wasn't elaborated on enough, in my personal opinion, which is important when there isn't really a rhyming scheme. Don't get me wrong through, I like the concept , definitely a lot potential, I look forward to reading your future works.
