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The Girl
I never thought I'd be the girl that would hang out in dirty places where people smoked herbs and sniffed happiness into their nostrils. The one with black nails and red lipstick and a constant laugh that hid all the dead people in her life. The one who stopped believing in a God that took away her family and she would have some gin with her coffee, London Dry. The one who rebelled against society even though she is a part of it. She would cry in her closet but she would be happy because being sad meant being alive and the world she's in demands a brainless drone to cram in useless information.
The girl that would open her eyes to the real world, the one filled with secrets.
The girl that would open her eyes to the real world, the one filled with secrets.
Published 9th Sep 2014
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Anonymous
9th Sep 2014 1:11am
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11th Sep 2014 00:35am
This is a cool write.
"I never thought I'd be the girl that would hang out in dirty places where people smoked herbs and sniffed happiness into their nostrils. The one with black nails and red lipstick and a constant laugh that hid all the dead people in her life."
That is a great opening and just really cool lines.
And the sniffed happiness part is awesome.
It would be cool to see this written in stanzas but then again, you probably want it this way.
"I never thought I'd be the girl that would hang out in dirty places where people smoked herbs and sniffed happiness into their nostrils. The one with black nails and red lipstick and a constant laugh that hid all the dead people in her life."
That is a great opening and just really cool lines.
And the sniffed happiness part is awesome.
It would be cool to see this written in stanzas but then again, you probably want it this way.
11th Sep 2014 11:14pm
I can't write well with stanzas haha it's weird, thank you though and you too Crazy_Admirer (:
1st Oct 2014 7:01pm
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yeah, what Anthony said... i'd poet-it up a little more with some editing - stanzas n shit..
the content/theme has gotten redundant to me however u managed to give it an interesting look.
keep writin
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yeah, what Anthony said... i'd poet-it up a little more with some editing - stanzas n shit..
the content/theme has gotten redundant to me however u managed to give it an interesting look.
keep writin
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