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My Lover (revisited and revised)
Show me wonder, show me greed
Slit my wrists and watch me bleed
take my heart and rape my soul
Break me down to make you whole
Look at me with love and scorn
You're lost inside both broke and torn
Through the anger love did grow
Kiss me now and kill me slow
Pilfer my money, subdue my mind
Confused and twisted up inside
Kiss my lips, touch my breast
Rip my heart out of my chest
You want more but inside I'm dead
Laying there upon your bed
Eyes fade blank, lips turn blue
There's nothing of me left for you
Published 18th Aug 2014
| Edited 1st Aug 2017
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18th Aug 2014 8:42pm
really enjoy reading this poem. giving your all to someone that keeps on taking without giving
19th Aug 2014 1:40am
Dang, I'm loving the rhyme. Great flow, love the dark depths, simply splendidly unpleasant. I like unpleasant...
19th Aug 2014 4:35am
9th Sep 2014 1:26am
Duality. Showed both sides of a poisonous coin.
You write well. Keep them coming ☺
You write well. Keep them coming ☺
9th Sep 2014 1:43am
28th Feb 2015 4:05am
I simply adore this poem! When I first made this account, I thought the majority of the site was total shit. But I found one good writer (or rather he found me and commented) and I followed is trail to more only to realize that several the good writers had sort of banded up. Alas, I found you. Simply wonderful, not only can the reader "feel" the poem, but it flows beautifully off the tongue. I don't mean to be a gush or kiss-ass here, but I must say - well done. Very well done...
Actually, I like it so much, may I post it on my website (in the making, not up yet) so long as I give you full credit for your own work (duh ^-^')?
Actually, I like it so much, may I post it on my website (in the making, not up yet) so long as I give you full credit for your own work (duh ^-^')?
8th Mar 2015 6:15pm
