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Partisan Blades
They ruled under quartered moons and a pale sun,
while their pulses throbbed and ebbed with the tides.
They licked their blades with scarred tongues,
impatient for the flow, drunk on bloodlust.
Cold steel dispersed in rolling bursts,
faster than storm clouds, hoofbeats rained drumfire.
The black mud churned with rabid foam that flew
from the mouths of filthy war hounds.
Published 20th Jul 2014
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20th Jul 2014 00:22am
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22nd Jul 2014 5:38am
Jackpot, Gabriel. This line has struck most of us! I don't know where that came from...
Thank you.
Thank you.
20th Jul 2014 00:26am
Hmmmm sounds like some beer drinking hell raisers I know :D
Excellent punch Dear Atakti!!!
-Glad to see You roaming the streets, You've been missed!!!
Excellent punch Dear Atakti!!!
-Glad to see You roaming the streets, You've been missed!!!
22nd Jul 2014 5:38am
Anonymous
20th Jul 2014 4:26am
Right on, lit fuses....ready to get down and do work! Perfect, thanks! Mike
22nd Jul 2014 5:39am
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20th Jul 2014 10:44pm
Your poem kept making me think about mongol hordes, apoctalyptic horsemen, and then Israel...
22nd Jul 2014 5:44am
I guess Israel is on people's minds now. I wrote this thinking about being a bloodthirsty warrior from older times. Battle on horseback seems to make more sense... not necessarily noble, but hard work nonetheless.
21st Jul 2014 3:40pm
22nd Jul 2014 5:47am
Thank you, whale. It was inspired by the phrases 'blood moon' and 'April blood' by the WidowFrost from *gasp*! Another poetry site.
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22nd Jul 2014 1:49am
My Friend,
Your imagery is very vivid...both intense, and unique. I felt as if i had been transported through time... into the realm of this advancing, unrelenting army of barbaric warriors.
My mind was filled with a very disturbing picture of a warrior, running his sword through a resisting opponent...then in a wild frenzy,removing the blade, cleaning it with his tongue--enjoying the repeated ritual. ( WELL DONE, actually!!)
To paraphrase Julius Caesar---They came...they saw...they conquered!!!
Your imagery is very vivid...both intense, and unique. I felt as if i had been transported through time... into the realm of this advancing, unrelenting army of barbaric warriors.
My mind was filled with a very disturbing picture of a warrior, running his sword through a resisting opponent...then in a wild frenzy,removing the blade, cleaning it with his tongue--enjoying the repeated ritual. ( WELL DONE, actually!!)
To paraphrase Julius Caesar---They came...they saw...they conquered!!!
22nd Jul 2014 5:50am
Well, your version of it is quite the thrill!
Mine was this: impatient for first bloodspill, before they engaged the enemy, they licked the blades of their weapons, cut their tongues, tasted blood (hence the scarred tongues)...
Thank you, Enchantress...
Mine was this: impatient for first bloodspill, before they engaged the enemy, they licked the blades of their weapons, cut their tongues, tasted blood (hence the scarred tongues)...
Thank you, Enchantress...
Anonymous
22nd Jul 2014 1:43pm
I see bats returning to the nest of the sacred black bat mother.......
Nicely written!
Nicely written!
4th Aug 2014 6:01am
28th Jul 2014 5:01pm
I just watched King Arthur and these lines really resonated with the fierceness of such a battle…
They licked their blades with scarred tongues,
impatient for the flow, drunk on bloodlust.
Really enjoyed this Atakti!!
They licked their blades with scarred tongues,
impatient for the flow, drunk on bloodlust.
Really enjoyed this Atakti!!
4th Aug 2014 6:02am
