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Nimbus
Pleasure takes form
Of raindrops
With a quaint disposition
That fall onto my hair,
And soak into my head.
I could feel his breath
In the whispers
Of the recordings he sent,
Caressing the curves
Of my mind.
I like to run
My calloused fingertips
Over my fantasies.
It gives them texture,
But keeps them in reach.
Clouds roll out
And take with them
My raindrop fancy.
Until the next storm,
When I'm caressed again.
Of raindrops
With a quaint disposition
That fall onto my hair,
And soak into my head.
I could feel his breath
In the whispers
Of the recordings he sent,
Caressing the curves
Of my mind.
I like to run
My calloused fingertips
Over my fantasies.
It gives them texture,
But keeps them in reach.
Clouds roll out
And take with them
My raindrop fancy.
Until the next storm,
When I'm caressed again.
Published 15th Jul 2014
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15th Jul 2014 12:04pm
This is impressively penned! Smooth n flawless delivery
N truly creative... Loved it my friend :)
N truly creative... Loved it my friend :)
15th Jul 2014 1:13pm
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23rd Jul 2014 6:46pm
Awesome is the flow of this piece Madi!!
Great read sweets!!
Sweet pen!!
Sir Lancelott
Great read sweets!!
Sweet pen!!
Sir Lancelott
24th Jul 2014 9:10pm
They feed our spirit and make our faith grow stronger. Excellent write Madi you should read my poem "Ebony Sky" I think you will enjoy it. Again nicely done.
24th Jul 2014 11:15pm
25th Jul 2014 00:25am
Attracted to the use of words:
"And soak into my head"
"Caressing the curves
Of my mind."
"I like to run
My calloused fingertips
Over my fantasies. "
superb!
"And soak into my head"
"Caressing the curves
Of my mind."
"I like to run
My calloused fingertips
Over my fantasies. "
superb!
Anonymous
31st Jul 2014 1:58pm
Lovely - thanks for this.
27th Sep 2014 7:52pm
This poem is beautiful. It's blend of the abstract and the concrete was brilliant and very sensual. It describes the experience of sensual thoughts. It doesn't dive into them saying what they are, but it takes the thoughts and gives them form and a general nature. "Pleasure takes form
Of raindrops"
It is amazing how you and ideas interact with each other, and how the mind is given a body as well. Within the reader, he/she can sense with their mind just as you do how these fantasies feel. You guide us through your experience and give us markers like "Pleasure takes form" and "It gives them texture" to cue us to attempt to feel the abstract sensations as if they were concrete objects. Then, a context that we can use to aid us with more greatly perceiving these sensations within the second verse. And our tool for feeling the textural forms of these abstract emotions is the mind as when you said "caressing the curves of my mind." All of this great attempt is for us to feel more deeply the erotic bliss of thinking about somebody. Though my eyes can't conceive what would be the shape of fantasies, my mind must have perceived it and drank the entire scene because I feel very warm inside now as if I as well have just had a hypersexual experience. Thank you :)
Of raindrops"
It is amazing how you and ideas interact with each other, and how the mind is given a body as well. Within the reader, he/she can sense with their mind just as you do how these fantasies feel. You guide us through your experience and give us markers like "Pleasure takes form" and "It gives them texture" to cue us to attempt to feel the abstract sensations as if they were concrete objects. Then, a context that we can use to aid us with more greatly perceiving these sensations within the second verse. And our tool for feeling the textural forms of these abstract emotions is the mind as when you said "caressing the curves of my mind." All of this great attempt is for us to feel more deeply the erotic bliss of thinking about somebody. Though my eyes can't conceive what would be the shape of fantasies, my mind must have perceived it and drank the entire scene because I feel very warm inside now as if I as well have just had a hypersexual experience. Thank you :)
28th Sep 2014 00:33am
I have been deciphered and I don't know what to do about it.
Thank you for the time you put into that comment. I think it gave me the pick-me-up I so desperately needs.
Hope you stay all warm and fuzzy inside.
Sincerely,
Madison
Thank you for the time you put into that comment. I think it gave me the pick-me-up I so desperately needs.
Hope you stay all warm and fuzzy inside.
Sincerely,
Madison
