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Fading
Roses are red
knuckles are blue
you're backstabbing me
I'm backstabbing you
why we keep this up
I have not a clue
we're running to hell
and it's nothing new
pitchforks and glass
and fiery hues
razors and knives
and microwaved Jews
you're sinking my ship
I'm sinking yours too
fucking this shit up
because it's just what I do
we're both in hell burning
as friend and as foe
at it like rabbits
we've reached a low
there's no getting out
and that we both know
and passersby near
enjoying the show
like in 3D animation
this movie we're making
so the rest of the nation
can love and start hating
some will rate low
and others high ratings
as our bodies in hell
can break and start fading
knuckles are blue
you're backstabbing me
I'm backstabbing you
why we keep this up
I have not a clue
we're running to hell
and it's nothing new
pitchforks and glass
and fiery hues
razors and knives
and microwaved Jews
you're sinking my ship
I'm sinking yours too
fucking this shit up
because it's just what I do
we're both in hell burning
as friend and as foe
at it like rabbits
we've reached a low
there's no getting out
and that we both know
and passersby near
enjoying the show
like in 3D animation
this movie we're making
so the rest of the nation
can love and start hating
some will rate low
and others high ratings
as our bodies in hell
can break and start fading
Published 12th Jul 2014
| Edited 17th Sep 2014
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12th Jul 2014 2:20pm
Not as keen on rhymes as I could be, yet these all seemed to work,
"at it like rabbits
we've reached a low
there's no getting out
and that we both know
and passersby near
enjoying the show "
Pretty clever, does definitely make the world seem as seedy as it can be.
Considering the pace of this, a few nice points are made well.
Not sure if I like
"fucking this shit up, because it's just what I do" seems like something else could fit better, but then again, I have no suggestion.
Nice write
Be Happy
"at it like rabbits
we've reached a low
there's no getting out
and that we both know
and passersby near
enjoying the show "
Pretty clever, does definitely make the world seem as seedy as it can be.
Considering the pace of this, a few nice points are made well.
Not sure if I like
"fucking this shit up, because it's just what I do" seems like something else could fit better, but then again, I have no suggestion.
Nice write
Be Happy
12th Jul 2014 2:50pm
Gives a clear idea of the opposite of the bright side in a good way. Shows what its like to be burned.
