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Life Support In The Far Distance
Without the heart it is but repetitive motion
void of meaning and another number to discard
whispering statements with no meaning
appreciated by the less respected used car salesman
Without the heart it is an avalanche of one night stands
no safe harbor to seek refuge in during a storm
lacking nuances of in depth commitment
like best junk food that has done nothing to quench the appetite
Without the heart two people are victimized
fractures ever present and impossible to heal
down the road the victims multiply
friends, family, and tragically the children
So all apologies in my trepidation
for truly it isn't a reflection of you
for you see my heart was left for road kill
soon to cease beating as the vultures do their will
void of meaning and another number to discard
whispering statements with no meaning
appreciated by the less respected used car salesman
Without the heart it is an avalanche of one night stands
no safe harbor to seek refuge in during a storm
lacking nuances of in depth commitment
like best junk food that has done nothing to quench the appetite
Without the heart two people are victimized
fractures ever present and impossible to heal
down the road the victims multiply
friends, family, and tragically the children
So all apologies in my trepidation
for truly it isn't a reflection of you
for you see my heart was left for road kill
soon to cease beating as the vultures do their will
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Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 2:11pm
re: Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 2:25pm
Oh I will--- just a reflection of the limitations I am dealing with at the moment because of bronchitis.
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16th Jun 2014 3:20pm
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re: Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 8:05pm
one of your writes planted some thoughts in my head so I owe you much with this one
Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 4:52pm
...this read like a personal observation, speaking from experience, food for thought, etc.....
I think each reader can definitely take something away from this ink, because as Lily has stated, it's truly relatable.
I thought "Without The Heart" rings better as a title. :)
Enjoyed the read, Jazz! Xo
I think each reader can definitely take something away from this ink, because as Lily has stated, it's truly relatable.
I thought "Without The Heart" rings better as a title. :)
Enjoyed the read, Jazz! Xo
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re: Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 8:07pm
my bad; I get "prickly" about titles that are too much like headings used for earlier compositions
Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 5:20pm
I agree with Rain bro. Jazz..."Without The Heart" sounds better. Excellent thoughts well spoken.
I'm just having problem with junk food as quencher of the appetite because we usually use quench for thirst. Other than that this piece is beautifully done and well crafted.
@EngrVV
I'm just having problem with junk food as quencher of the appetite because we usually use quench for thirst. Other than that this piece is beautifully done and well crafted.
@EngrVV
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re: Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 8:09pm
yeah I was mixing things there and never got it straightened out before publishing.
Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
Anonymous
16th Jun 2014 6:01pm
I feel this and find it relatable..I agree so much with your insights here.
Flows effortlessly and is powerfully direct..
much enjoyed the read
:-) peace
stanza 2, line 1
is "an" avalanche...I think it is a typo as "a"
unless you meant it :-)
Flows effortlessly and is powerfully direct..
much enjoyed the read
:-) peace
stanza 2, line 1
is "an" avalanche...I think it is a typo as "a"
unless you meant it :-)

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re: Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 8:12pm
thanks for alerting me; I would love to blame it on the bronchitis but it was probably more a case of me being sloppy!
Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 7:52pm
So sorry for your condition Jazz.I love the way you have turned that limitation into inspiration.
Well done!It will be okey!
Well done!It will be okey!
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re: Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 8:14pm
thanks for the kind thoughts; it turned out that my boss can do without me until Thursday so I can rest most of this week
Re: Life Support In The Far Distance
16th Jun 2014 10:08pm
Thats great!Get some rest, keep smiling and keep the faith alive.
All will be well.
All will be well.
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