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Just A Stupid Girl
Just a girl with a stupid heart
Who laughs manically as her world falls apart
Nothing is new in this world of old
No one to Love, no one to hold
Just a stupid girl full of dreams
Filled to the brim with broken screams
Nothing can stop this nightmare
No one can attract my heartless stare
No point in trying to lie
I only fall and never fly
Tired of only crying, tired of every sigh
Tired of every single fucking lie
Tired of being just a stupid girl
Tired of life making me hurl
Tired of all this shit
And the guys who don't know how to hit
You can't protect me from these lie
That we won't ever say good bye
I want to love you so
but all I do is choose to go
I want to run and hide
And disguise what's on the inside
I fall to the ground
Never making a single sound
Too much is going on, too much is being taken
You just keep Breakin' and breakin'
Why do you do this to me?
this is the last time I'll be alone you see
For this love is killing me
You are so far away baby
You can't kiss or touch
And those are thing I want so much
I lie and say I'm fine
But you recognize that it's just a line
It's been awhile since I've tried
It's been awhile since I've cried
For you surely don't care
Otherwise why are you still over there?
Have you met some else? are they what you want?
While Life is ready, tied and taunt
To be loved and taken
Not taken and broken
I don't know what to do
When life has been so focused on you
I'm everything you want me to be
But I'm still stupid old me
I'm faithful to a fault
But they broken the strongest bolt
I'm tired of it all
I just want to fall
I'm so sick of the hail
So ready for it all to fail
So much is going on in my life
So tired of living life on the edge of a knife
Where are you? why aren't you ever there?
That you don't know, or is that you don't care?
You tell I'm the only one but that's a huge lie
The love of you life is war and there's nothing I can do
I am a gentle beast not made nor built for being fierce
I hope these words don't pierce
You aren't the boy I used to love
now youre a man that rises above
what's the point of loving me
when you'll just be leaving me
Who laughs manically as her world falls apart
Nothing is new in this world of old
No one to Love, no one to hold
Just a stupid girl full of dreams
Filled to the brim with broken screams
Nothing can stop this nightmare
No one can attract my heartless stare
No point in trying to lie
I only fall and never fly
Tired of only crying, tired of every sigh
Tired of every single fucking lie
Tired of being just a stupid girl
Tired of life making me hurl
Tired of all this shit
And the guys who don't know how to hit
You can't protect me from these lie
That we won't ever say good bye
I want to love you so
but all I do is choose to go
I want to run and hide
And disguise what's on the inside
I fall to the ground
Never making a single sound
Too much is going on, too much is being taken
You just keep Breakin' and breakin'
Why do you do this to me?
this is the last time I'll be alone you see
For this love is killing me
You are so far away baby
You can't kiss or touch
And those are thing I want so much
I lie and say I'm fine
But you recognize that it's just a line
It's been awhile since I've tried
It's been awhile since I've cried
For you surely don't care
Otherwise why are you still over there?
Have you met some else? are they what you want?
While Life is ready, tied and taunt
To be loved and taken
Not taken and broken
I don't know what to do
When life has been so focused on you
I'm everything you want me to be
But I'm still stupid old me
I'm faithful to a fault
But they broken the strongest bolt
I'm tired of it all
I just want to fall
I'm so sick of the hail
So ready for it all to fail
So much is going on in my life
So tired of living life on the edge of a knife
Where are you? why aren't you ever there?
That you don't know, or is that you don't care?
You tell I'm the only one but that's a huge lie
The love of you life is war and there's nothing I can do
I am a gentle beast not made nor built for being fierce
I hope these words don't pierce
You aren't the boy I used to love
now youre a man that rises above
what's the point of loving me
when you'll just be leaving me
Published 2nd Jun 2014
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2nd Jun 2014 5:16pm
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3rd Jun 2014 1:10am
Love the rhyming scheme, although I think maybe it could flow a little better by trimming up some of the unnecessary syllables, and it seems to go in circles, lacking direction. But still, thoroughly enjoyed reading :)
3rd Jun 2014 5:17pm
3rd Jun 2014 7:01pm
Men will never understand but that's how we are "emotional" like the stock market.
27th Jun 2014 4:28pm
This has the tightest rhythm I've seen yet in your work. Fucking awesome.
It takes a disciplined hand to hook rhyme structures back and re-capture your reader's focus..
For you surely don't care
Otherwise why are you still over there?
Have you met some else? are they what you want?
While Life is ready, tied and taunt
To be loved and taken
Not taken and broken
I don't know what to do
When life has been so focused on you
I'm everything you want me to be
But I'm still stupid old me
I'm faithful to a fault
But they broken the strongest bolt
Teasing a near-rhyme and repeating the bit later, anchored to an escalation of emotion is PURE FUCKING HYPNOSIS!
It has been an awesome ride watching your work excel. I always feel a stab in my stomach every time you call yourself stupid or pitiful or blame yourself for emotional swings.
It's part of being young and discovering the very limits of your feelings. You're supposed to be clinging to the roller coaster. Doesn't make you weak or pitiful. And being emotionally vulnerable or susceptible ... isn't stupid.
It's empathy and a big heart. In a world full of sharks and players. Your heart sparks betrayers. Fuck 'em.
That aside, it's cool to see that when your emotions get white-hot in places, your chops stay tight and focused. That's using the energy right, instead of blowing it out wildly. That's mature writing. Good work, warrior-sister.
It's weird feeling pride when your stuff gets better, given that I had nothing the Hell to do with it. Whatevs, your art is uplifting.
It takes a disciplined hand to hook rhyme structures back and re-capture your reader's focus..
For you surely don't care
Otherwise why are you still over there?
Have you met some else? are they what you want?
While Life is ready, tied and taunt
To be loved and taken
Not taken and broken
I don't know what to do
When life has been so focused on you
I'm everything you want me to be
But I'm still stupid old me
I'm faithful to a fault
But they broken the strongest bolt
Teasing a near-rhyme and repeating the bit later, anchored to an escalation of emotion is PURE FUCKING HYPNOSIS!
It has been an awesome ride watching your work excel. I always feel a stab in my stomach every time you call yourself stupid or pitiful or blame yourself for emotional swings.
It's part of being young and discovering the very limits of your feelings. You're supposed to be clinging to the roller coaster. Doesn't make you weak or pitiful. And being emotionally vulnerable or susceptible ... isn't stupid.
It's empathy and a big heart. In a world full of sharks and players. Your heart sparks betrayers. Fuck 'em.
That aside, it's cool to see that when your emotions get white-hot in places, your chops stay tight and focused. That's using the energy right, instead of blowing it out wildly. That's mature writing. Good work, warrior-sister.
It's weird feeling pride when your stuff gets better, given that I had nothing the Hell to do with it. Whatevs, your art is uplifting.
28th Jun 2014 6:16am
i always get a wild grin at your praise Loki. thank you so much for taking the time and reading it.
