tears of acid..

Such a sad poem..beautiful and poignant peace Crim

Thanks.. it took a whole two min. To write it.. I was on the bus and was listening to a song.. and it just came to me (: I only posted it to see if my writing was worthy of DUP.... *fingers crossed* I'm still hoping I can do okay..

I've been reading all your poems for a few minutes and most of them are really, really good. However, if you went back and edited them to have breaks in the lines and stanzas, it would definitely help the quality and professionalism. (Also, cleaning up the capitals and punctuation). It would make them easier to read, and (I'm just generalizing here) more people would be willing to read them. :]

Ex.
tears of acid pour down my cheek,
with a weakened voice i begin to speak..
i loved you once,
i love you still,
always have,
always will..
but i wonder still,
why i feel..
if i didnt the pain would ease
and the sorrow would fade,
all along i had no idea
it was just a beautiful facade..
so i grab a tissue as my face grows placid,
and these tears keep rolling..
these tears of acid...

My phone doesnt exactly give those options, but I can get on my actual computer and clean them up a little.. thanks for the advice cori (: .. definitely taken into consideration (: .. btw idk y people are so afraid of critiquing me!! (: ur the only one tht has so far (: .. I admire tht, thanks again ..

I love this it says so much in such few words.. Reminds of me when I was a teen.. Very good now I'm going to go read the rest of your poems

I'm inspired daily by different things (: even you guys here in DU inspire me.. whether the inspiration be sadness, hatred, anger, love, heart break, or even happiness .. its there.. thank you (: its comforting to kno someone likes my work (:

truly beautifil and magnificent

Thank you (: ..

deeeep!!!!!!

thats a great poem great eotional feel to it

thanks