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sheeple be like......
http://occupyourbank.ca/Money-The_Canadian_Experience.php
🍼 + 📰 = 🎲💣
Your life is tuff enough to dwell 👾
So after work you need to chill 🙈 🙉 🙊👌
You don't like how it makes you feel
To lean about the banks who steal 💸
Conspiriousy theories are not true?
There is nothing there to look into?📉📲
You watch your favorite tv show 🎬
You feel there is no need to know 🔬
Know one cares about politics 👎
They sip Thier alkaholic mix 🍷 🍺 🍸
Must keep within Thier comfort zone 💊
What others think means something strong
911 was no bomb? ✈️💭
Terrorists threats are more strong?💬
Wake the fuck up cause your wrong💔
Hope in this is never gone:
http://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Constitution_Act,_1867
🍼 + 📰 = 🎲💣
Your life is tuff enough to dwell 👾
So after work you need to chill 🙈 🙉 🙊👌
You don't like how it makes you feel
To lean about the banks who steal 💸
Conspiriousy theories are not true?
There is nothing there to look into?📉📲
You watch your favorite tv show 🎬
You feel there is no need to know 🔬
Know one cares about politics 👎
They sip Thier alkaholic mix 🍷 🍺 🍸
Must keep within Thier comfort zone 💊
What others think means something strong
911 was no bomb? ✈️💭
Terrorists threats are more strong?💬
Wake the fuck up cause your wrong💔
Hope in this is never gone:
http://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Constitution_Act,_1867
Published 23rd Apr 2014
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23rd Apr 2014 10:53pm
Know one cares about politics
They sip Thier alkaholic mix
thats a real nice rhyme... good thoughts.
normally i wouldnt get so involved in other peoples personal works but seeing as you asked for feedback there is one thing i would change. the very first line where you slant rhyme dwell with chill feel and steal. chill feel and steal are perfect slant rhymes but i would have changed dwell with something like, cuz your life is at a standstill so after work you need to chill. but thats only an opinion
They sip Thier alkaholic mix
thats a real nice rhyme... good thoughts.
normally i wouldnt get so involved in other peoples personal works but seeing as you asked for feedback there is one thing i would change. the very first line where you slant rhyme dwell with chill feel and steal. chill feel and steal are perfect slant rhymes but i would have changed dwell with something like, cuz your life is at a standstill so after work you need to chill. but thats only an opinion
24th Apr 2014 5:59am
Yup very good point. No worries I appreciate your comment and perfection is where its at. Very good point about the rhymes. You know your shit.
Damn pill
Stand still
in the
land fill lol
Demand skill! I love it!
Cheers to rhyme philosophy
respect!
Ps comment anytime, no worries
Damn pill
Stand still
in the
land fill lol
Demand skill! I love it!
Cheers to rhyme philosophy
respect!
Ps comment anytime, no worries
