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Into Oblivion
All encompassing and
searing darkness
If I could leech your embodiment
Into my loving
(but jealous)
carcass
My completion would be
by your obsidian decadence
(Written for the Darkness Invades Me Competition)
searing darkness
If I could leech your embodiment
Into my loving
(but jealous)
carcass
My completion would be
by your obsidian decadence
(Written for the Darkness Invades Me Competition)
Published 25th Mar 2014
| Edited 26th Mar 2014
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25th Mar 2014 11:25pm
26th Mar 2014 00:17am
1st Jun 2014 1:10am
All I see is big words. The concept is relatively basic, too, and not in the good 'simple-but-powerful' way, although I can see someone having that interpretation. Plus, it's about 14 lines too short to have a nice impact.
