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not care in the world
..today is short but tomorrow is long
I'll be here for a min but gone in a second
This poem has no meaning and the universe has only one planet
so don't sit there and stair cause your bored or speechless
Do something find your own answers....
I'll be here for a min but gone in a second
This poem has no meaning and the universe has only one planet
so don't sit there and stair cause your bored or speechless
Do something find your own answers....
Published 22nd Mar 2014
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22nd Mar 2014 5:25pm
Cut the ellipses on either end of the poem for starters - they're distracting and don't represent anything before of after
it's Stare* not stair*, and there's no reason to not use minute, min just cheapens the whole thing.
because*
you're*
You say nothing with this piece and did it sloppily. Do you hate me yet?
it's Stare* not stair*, and there's no reason to not use minute, min just cheapens the whole thing.
because*
you're*
You say nothing with this piece and did it sloppily. Do you hate me yet?
22nd Mar 2014 8:32pm
why wld i hate...ue less than a problem..ur thoughts dnt hurt...not a care in a world...
29th Apr 2014 2:13pm
