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Life is A War
The scars are there,
Getting deeper day by day,
Never healing completely.
Apollo shines down,
But his light never reaches my heart.
Selene can't reach my soul,
With her calming moonlight beauty.
Athena tried to give me wisdom,
But it never reaches my thoughts.
Ares has taken me over,
Making me uncontrollable,
Making me want to hurt.
Life is a never ending war,
Never stopping for anyone,
Even those in the deepest of pain.
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Getting deeper day by day,
Never healing completely.
Apollo shines down,
But his light never reaches my heart.
Selene can't reach my soul,
With her calming moonlight beauty.
Athena tried to give me wisdom,
But it never reaches my thoughts.
Ares has taken me over,
Making me uncontrollable,
Making me want to hurt.
Life is a never ending war,
Never stopping for anyone,
Even those in the deepest of pain.
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Published 17th Mar 2014
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17th Mar 2014 1:56pm
Welcome to DUP--I hope that you find this community and outlet of expression something the helps you!
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"Athena tried to give me wisdom,
But it never reaches my thoughts."
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"Athena tried to give me wisdom,
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20th Mar 2014 12:25pm
17th Mar 2014 11:05pm
Oh my my how true this is
never stopping for anyone pain tht is inevitable never stops hurting we must continue to fight despite the pain. Awesome write
never stopping for anyone pain tht is inevitable never stops hurting we must continue to fight despite the pain. Awesome write
20th Mar 2014 12:26pm
Yah...I wrote this when I was severely hurting inside and it is still true to me to this day :)
21st Mar 2014 2:30pm
You need to stop putting in punctuation for the sake of it. It may look good to you, but we don't have the same internal monologue as you when you read it out, so the commas and fullstops are distracting and ruin the pacing. Linebreaks operate the same as a comma anyway, so most of the time they're redundant.
Other than that I did quite like this piece - the greek mythology twist on emotions was something I've rarely come across, so It's nice to see people playing away from the cliche's,
Other than that I did quite like this piece - the greek mythology twist on emotions was something I've rarely come across, so It's nice to see people playing away from the cliche's,
24th Mar 2014 1:25pm
