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poetry keeps me sane
when im in vain.
it keeps me on the right path
even though my life wont last.
sitting in this room
certain doom....
I believe is coming for me.
life comes and goes
like the cool winters snows.
my mind goes........
with out a trace..
when im in vain.
it keeps me on the right path
even though my life wont last.
sitting in this room
certain doom....
I believe is coming for me.
life comes and goes
like the cool winters snows.
my mind goes........
with out a trace..
Published 2nd Mar 2011
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3rd Mar 2011 1:40am
...sucked.
You need to look up the word "vain". Between that, and using "im" instead of "I'm", I stopped reading...
The first line needs to kick, really kick...and this didn't.
You need to look up the word "vain". Between that, and using "im" instead of "I'm", I stopped reading...
The first line needs to kick, really kick...and this didn't.
6th Mar 2011 5:06am
19th Jun 2014 5:39am
Ambitious title... fun n simple! Save the periods 4 you really want them 2 mean something. Keep grindin
