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Was It My Fault?
Was it my fault?
I really can't tell.
Maybe I got myself into this hell.
Was it my fault?
Did I lead you on?
Was it your lack of control,
Or my infant siren song?
I wonder.
Was it my fault?
Did I invite your scalding hand?
It burned to the bone,
But I can't blame you.
You're only a man
Was it my fault?
I don't understand.
How could I, still innocent,
Possibly have planned
Something so vile,
So evil,
So sick to the core.
Does this mean that I'm dammned?
Was it my fault?
Mommy, am I going to hell?
Am I some cheap whore?
Were you under my spell?
Was it my fault?
Am I now to be burned?
Will I now forever be spurned?
Is that what will happen
When they've all learned?
Was it my fault?
I still can't tell.
This is my secret,
And I'll take it to hell.
I really can't tell.
Maybe I got myself into this hell.
Was it my fault?
Did I lead you on?
Was it your lack of control,
Or my infant siren song?
I wonder.
Was it my fault?
Did I invite your scalding hand?
It burned to the bone,
But I can't blame you.
You're only a man
Was it my fault?
I don't understand.
How could I, still innocent,
Possibly have planned
Something so vile,
So evil,
So sick to the core.
Does this mean that I'm dammned?
Was it my fault?
Mommy, am I going to hell?
Am I some cheap whore?
Were you under my spell?
Was it my fault?
Am I now to be burned?
Will I now forever be spurned?
Is that what will happen
When they've all learned?
Was it my fault?
I still can't tell.
This is my secret,
And I'll take it to hell.
Written by
HarleyQuinn
(Riah)
Published 2nd Mar 2014
| Edited 1st Apr 2014
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Re: Was It My Fault?
2nd Mar 2014 12:27pm
I like the use of repetition but I found it ended quite abruptly , keep working at it, it sounds nice.
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
2nd Mar 2014 5:46pm
Thank you for the feedback ^.^ I'll work on it some more and post a second draft later.
Re: Was It My Fault?
2nd Mar 2014 6:35pm
nice write...gives me the feeling that you have to hide something,that wasn't your fault (peace)
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
3rd Mar 2014 5:22am
Thanks dude I aPpreciate it, that's definitely the feeling I was going for.
Re: Was It My Fault?
3rd Mar 2014 6:13pm
A very painful write written from a child's perspective full of hurt and fear.. a very brave write.. with respect Crim
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
3rd Mar 2014 7:34pm
Re: Was It My Fault?
4th Mar 2014 1:11am
Hmmm ...
Some interesting questions ....
How about an answers poem ???
Nah, jus kiddin', but, I think this is a cool write .....
I believe Curtis Mayfield said it best.....
If there's a Hell ... BELOW ...
We're ALL ... Gonna go ...
Virge
Some interesting questions ....
How about an answers poem ???
Nah, jus kiddin', but, I think this is a cool write .....
I believe Curtis Mayfield said it best.....
If there's a Hell ... BELOW ...
We're ALL ... Gonna go ...
Virge
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
4th Mar 2014 1:24am
Thanks for the comment, always nice to hear a friendly voice. If I do go to hell at least I know I'll be in good company
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Re: Was It My Fault?
4th Mar 2014 2:35am
Awesome write! Nice flow and smart ink, I really enjoyed this piece, great job!
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
4th Mar 2014 2:51am
Thank you! After checking out your stuff on the forums I see that its high praise from a good writer
Re: Was It My Fault?
19th Mar 2014 5:14am
nice write.. don't lie to your pen and the ink will never drown you.. as to the end, abrupt is well placed..
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
19th Mar 2014 5:43am
Thank you for the feedback:) this is probably the second or third poem I ever wrote, I'm still working on it. I can't seem to find a way to end it, once I start its very difficult for me to stop, I'll post the newest version today.
Re: Was It My Fault?
21st Mar 2014 6:55pm
The self doubt and that self loathing thought of being cheap comes across, but I cant get over how perfectly the metaphor "infant siren" captures that. Very well done, I love that line.
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
21st Mar 2014 7:57pm
Ou so much, those were actually the word that inspired me to verbalise it for the first time
Re: Was It My Fault?
Anonymous
2nd Sep 2014 12:55pm
Damn Harley, this one might be my favorite of yours yet. Goood stuff.
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re: Re: Was It My Fault?
2nd Sep 2014 2:11pm
Re: Was It My Fault?
16th Feb 2015 7:52pm
Thank you for sharing this ... These stories always unroot me but I know it's important for victims to express their experiences not only for themselves but to give others courage.
Bravo!
Bravo!
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