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Acrostic the First
Always on the
Lookout for something.
Last at the walls, always
Observing but never immersing in the
World.
Take me far away
Over the walls.
Sheltered from reality
Under the illusion that
Feelings are
Fictitious.
Everyone tells me I’m wrong.
Really? Prove it.
No-one mans the walls anymore
Observing people inspired me
To topple the walls.
Lookout for something.
Last at the walls, always
Observing but never immersing in the
World.
Take me far away
Over the walls.
Sheltered from reality
Under the illusion that
Feelings are
Fictitious.
Everyone tells me I’m wrong.
Really? Prove it.
No-one mans the walls anymore
Observing people inspired me
To topple the walls.
Published 1st Oct 2009
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2nd Oct 2009 3:59am
I like the poem, but there are a few things I would change, firstly give it a title that represents the poem or subject, its not the old days when poems were numbered :P Secondly, Acrosstic poems are too simple, If you want my advice, keep the poem the exact same in terms of the words that you use and lines, but structure them differently, according to what you would have had it not been an accrostic poem, then keep the words that would be capitalized accrosticly and keep the initial letter capitalized, let people figure out for themselves what your really saying, if they can't, they don't deserve to.
Anonymous
9th Jan 2013 8:36am
I think its a very well composed poem, maybe some lines could be changed. Some tend to be chopped off... but the context and the whole is very well written
