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broken within me
Take back what you said
it can't be true i can't
no i don't believe
As you speak the words
to say good
my world,
my heart
vanish as if they weren't there
you say "i dont love you"
,but i love you
you say this will be the last
you stand before me
no it will not
i will fight
fight this growing pain of the truth
knowing i couldnt stop you from leaving
as you kiss me
i feel a hole
begin to mend its way in to my chest
of where my heart should beat
,but lies silent in this moment
as i try to look at you
where
you've dissappered
to much to over come
i fall onto my knees
my heart cry its blood filled tears
my eyes showing he true feeling of torture
behinde lost love
i myself remeber this day without loss of detail
i live without life
i breathe without breath
i cry without a sound
because you've stole it.
it can't be true i can't
no i don't believe
As you speak the words
to say good
my world,
my heart
vanish as if they weren't there
you say "i dont love you"
,but i love you
you say this will be the last
you stand before me
no it will not
i will fight
fight this growing pain of the truth
knowing i couldnt stop you from leaving
as you kiss me
i feel a hole
begin to mend its way in to my chest
of where my heart should beat
,but lies silent in this moment
as i try to look at you
where
you've dissappered
to much to over come
i fall onto my knees
my heart cry its blood filled tears
my eyes showing he true feeling of torture
behinde lost love
i myself remeber this day without loss of detail
i live without life
i breathe without breath
i cry without a sound
because you've stole it.
Published 18th Feb 2011
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20th Feb 2011 2:24pm
i really hope you keep writing, it is really deep and well, really really good
27th Feb 2011 8:11pm
27th Feb 2011 8:11pm
20th Feb 2011 3:01pm
This is a rather incoherent rambling. The first seven lines are specifically difficult. no capitalisation of 'I.' Commas at the beginning of lines. lots of tense malfunctions. Fringey likes it though!
20th Feb 2011 10:38pm
Anonymous
1st Mar 2011 11:05pm
"Fringey likes it though!"
Made me crack up and thought I'd share. ;)
Made me crack up and thought I'd share. ;)
1st Mar 2011 11:05pm
1st Mar 2011 11:06pm
