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Not what you expect
You've come to me in earnest,
A driving desire to become hot and sweaty...
Black and skin tight
suited up to play...
Holding me still
opening me up,
slipping yourself into me,
regaining your fit...
Positioning yourself in such a way
to cease the movement of my tongue.
Apparently this supports you,
Right there, on your bridge...
Strong hands pulling at my strings
Crisscrossing the laces up,
Pulling them tight,
Securing me to you,
Your prisoner as you pound away...
I thought you’d go on forever,
moving hard and rhythmic,
Seeming merciless with your fever...
The fierce tempo is quietening,
I can feel your blood pulsating.
Panting, releasing me with minimal movement,
casting me aside until it best suites you.
I hate being your running shoes.
A driving desire to become hot and sweaty...
Black and skin tight
suited up to play...
Holding me still
opening me up,
slipping yourself into me,
regaining your fit...
Positioning yourself in such a way
to cease the movement of my tongue.
Apparently this supports you,
Right there, on your bridge...
Strong hands pulling at my strings
Crisscrossing the laces up,
Pulling them tight,
Securing me to you,
Your prisoner as you pound away...
I thought you’d go on forever,
moving hard and rhythmic,
Seeming merciless with your fever...
The fierce tempo is quietening,
I can feel your blood pulsating.
Panting, releasing me with minimal movement,
casting me aside until it best suites you.
I hate being your running shoes.
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Re: Not what you expect
I was lucky enough to be online when you published this. It produced a highly visceral response at just the first read. This is one I will be reading a lot more. Wow. This one is seriously intense. And that last line blows me away; a really nice twist to all of the previous lines and what they actually mean...quite unexpected indeed! Yet even with that last line, the double-meaning remains and I see this on two levels simultaneously now when I re-read it. Amazing ink here x
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re: Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 12:33pm
He he Thanx Swiss... I've been toying with the idea for a couple of days; especially with all the different kinds of pieces on here, I was maybe a little nervous pressing "post"... Your feedback humbles me so much x
Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 3:41am
re: Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 12:34pm
Thanks for reading, it was fun writing this. Touched at your subscription too xx
Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 4:33am
My heart was pounding and I was working up a sweat reading this entry.
Wow, Glass
Great athletic erotica
xx
Sir
Wow, Glass
Great athletic erotica
xx
Sir
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re: Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 12:35pm
From you, your words touch me. Let's say I was inspired to write how I feel x
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28th Jan 2014 1:41pm
Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 6:24am
definately unexpected. & that last line doesn't necessarily need to be humorous...
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re: Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 12:36pm
No it doesn't and can be taken however... Thanx for stopping by John x :)
Re: Not what you expect
Anonymous
28th Jan 2014 10:27am
very very good, and unexpected
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re: Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 12:37pm
Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 9:30pm
I echo Swiss! Incredible read, with a amazing twist! This ink rocked! Definitely 'not what I expected'... ;) Xo
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re: Re: Not what you expect
28th Jan 2014 11:55pm
Re: Not what you expect
29th Jan 2014 5:53am
Lol clever you are my sweet n sexy one!
Love the double entendre within! :)
Love the double entendre within! :)
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re: Re: Not what you expect
29th Jan 2014 6:38am
Why thank you! I wanted to try something different and lead you down the path... x
Re: Not what you expect
29th Jan 2014 11:05pm