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Taken
You know I don't sleep
when I'm near you...
I'm a creature of preservation.
Maybe these bones
remember straining
under the taking of me...
Please hold me
while they dance
mercilessly in my soul
Wrap me in your body...
Don't be upset if I recoil.
It's not you,
It's them...
Recover me,
I'm unwillingly taken.
when I'm near you...
I'm a creature of preservation.
Maybe these bones
remember straining
under the taking of me...
Please hold me
while they dance
mercilessly in my soul
Wrap me in your body...
Don't be upset if I recoil.
It's not you,
It's them...
Recover me,
I'm unwillingly taken.
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Re: Taken
24th Jan 2014 2:32pm
Your words dance in a quiet rhythm of heat ....
Effective write. Few words. Emotion saying it all.
xo
Effective write. Few words. Emotion saying it all.
xo
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re: Re: Taken
28th Jan 2014 00:07am
Re: Taken
24th Jan 2014 7:42pm
I love the second stanza, Heart! Always impressed with your lovely ink...Xo
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re: Re: Taken
28th Jan 2014 00:20am
Re: Taken
25th Jan 2014 11:31pm
OMG... Heart of Glass WOW... i love this it is so beautiful
don't be upset if i recoil
it's not you
It's them
wow i love this
don't be upset if i recoil
it's not you
It's them
wow i love this
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re: Re: Taken
28th Jan 2014 00:21am
Re: Taken
26th Jan 2014 3:17am
There is a subjectivity to this that slips through my fingers and I keep trying to grasp hold. And I have read your poem so many times now that it gives me my own feelings of emotion...and I'm grateful to read your work.
Looking for more, please!
Looking for more, please!
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re: Re: Taken
28th Jan 2014 1:12am
I wanted to be direct and vague at the same time. I guess it relates to the individual who knows the same feelings...
Thank you for your comments and time Swiss, you're most valuable x
Thank you for your comments and time Swiss, you're most valuable x
Re: Taken
27th Jan 2014 3:01am
it's tough to fight what's inside. your lover will learn that you need to be held down. stark poetry...
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re: Re: Taken
28th Jan 2014 1:15am
Thank you John... we learn a lot from each other, everyone has their own demons that need to find solace.
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27th Jan 2014 6:39pm
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