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YOU TO ACHIEVE
Say how many times
I need say you’re beautiful
before you believe?
How many mountains
to their summit must I climb
to prove my true love?
How deep must I dive
in the most profound ocean
till your heart is won?
What great feats of thought
or discernment of feeling
will satiate your mind?
How tender my touch
how electric my kisses
will feed your passion?
I need say you’re beautiful
before you believe?
How many mountains
to their summit must I climb
to prove my true love?
How deep must I dive
in the most profound ocean
till your heart is won?
What great feats of thought
or discernment of feeling
will satiate your mind?
How tender my touch
how electric my kisses
will feed your passion?
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Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
15th Jan 2014 00:09am
Ahh love this GW!I do feel a bit of sadness or angst in this write but it's beautiful and sensual too!But that's just how I feel...I love it!
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re: Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
15th Jan 2014 00:15am
Thank you Tommie! Your perception is correct. I think we all wonder what it takes to win someone's love and devotion...even when you've been with them for years. Each individual has different requirements. And then, even more difficult to decide, what are my needs and desires and are they being met.
re: re: Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
15th Jan 2014 3:55am
That was a mouthful!I think the years just fade, dwindle away, yes some memories linger like dust on a vase, or maybe the blood stains that wouldn't come off the walls... ;)
But not all relationships SHOULD last, everyone deserves to be happy, if it's not working after all those years, it's probably time to bail!That's just how I see it!Personally! :-)
Now I'm going to break out my magic eraser and get after that blood! :D
But not all relationships SHOULD last, everyone deserves to be happy, if it's not working after all those years, it's probably time to bail!That's just how I see it!Personally! :-)
Now I'm going to break out my magic eraser and get after that blood! :D
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re: re: re: Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
15th Jan 2014 4:51am
Okay blood stains are super concerning! I can't imagine what you've been through and I'm very sorry that you've been treated with such violence.
Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
15th Jan 2014 3:16am
I know this well. Seems like you can give your all, yet it seems like it's not appreciated or enough. I have found at times it is not YOU, it's the insecurity the other has in them self or their heart feels different. Emotional write. Enjoyed! :)
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re: Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
15th Jan 2014 4:53am
Thank you so much Flowergirl. I am glad in some ways and sad in others that you can identify with the piece
Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
Anonymous
15th Jan 2014 7:38am
As many as it takes...

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re: Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
15th Jan 2014 7:39am
Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
16th Jan 2014 3:36am
I know this one GW. I have felt this strong. Sad that you do to. A heartfelt write brother. Thank you.
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re: Re: YOU TO ACHIEVE
16th Jan 2014 5:41am