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Spinning in Slipstream Galaxies
Within froth whirls of Akasha,
when the fabulous nebulae
blink for an eternity, a vortex
twin loops in amber flow.
Here the weight of souls
is breathed east of star rise
and the eye of the Void wells
up in an abundance of tides.
Find me in upper Samudra,
shed of Kālī’s mercy, my joy
spinning in slipstream galaxies
at the edge of expanding time.
Sinking torrents of dust glow
will pull you under — the Rigvedic
ships have long passed, Beloved.
In this moment, swim with me…
Entry in the '4x4' competition, topic "sink or swim"
Published 12th Jan 2014
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12th Jan 2014 6:58pm
A tale worthy of heinlein hinted at - of worlds different but contemporaneous of ours
Though the golden age has passed - sell we can swim together
Flows and feels - very pleasurable read
Though the golden age has passed - sell we can swim together
Flows and feels - very pleasurable read
13th Jan 2014 1:06pm
Thank you for the hat tip towards Heinlein... Different but parallel, I think. I'm so pleased you liked it, whale, thank you.
12th Jan 2014 8:06pm
Always feels like a plunge with Your Writes Atakti
within despair or to new lands-Always a journey!!!
Good Luck in the comp!!!
within despair or to new lands-Always a journey!!!
Good Luck in the comp!!!
13th Jan 2014 1:07pm
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12th Jan 2014 9:55pm
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13th Jan 2014 1:08pm
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13th Jan 2014 3:35am
I want to move to inside your head...
13th Jan 2014 1:09pm
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13th Jan 2014 3:49am
Beautiful, beyond my ability to imagine, but beautiful. God luck in the comp! Mike.
13th Jan 2014 1:10pm
Ah, Mike, there's a part of me thinking there's a challenge I have to conquer... perhaps I was too obtuse.
Many thanks for your words.
Many thanks for your words.
13th Jan 2014 4:58am
Anything astral from you, is an automatic list attach.. thank you Galactic Atakti.
13th Jan 2014 1:11pm
Aha, Jake, my weakness and yours - what can we do? The stars will persist.
Thank you!
Thank you!
13th Jan 2014 10:23am
13th Jan 2014 1:13pm
Feddeler, so happy to see that. I managed to avoid the words 'black' and 'sea' and yet you saw it... Now I'm satisfied...
Thank you for the luxurious comments.
Thank you for the luxurious comments.
13th Jan 2014 11:40am
You're definitely swimming, in a captivating Universe.
All the best in the comp Atakti. :)
All the best in the comp Atakti. :)
13th Jan 2014 1:13pm
13th Jan 2014 1:29pm
I got a feeling you could ink an epic galactic
adventure filled with romance, intrigue, action n
far out fantastical visions of the universe! in layman's terms
this was outta this world! :)
adventure filled with romance, intrigue, action n
far out fantastical visions of the universe! in layman's terms
this was outta this world! :)
14th Jan 2014 4:34pm
Oooh, you layin' challenges down now, and I'm not ready for epic yet!
... did I just say 'yet'? Crap! lol
Thank you so much, Poetik!
... did I just say 'yet'? Crap! lol
Thank you so much, Poetik!
13th Jan 2014 8:14pm
I felt a bit queazy at the sight of amber flow, but I pushed on...
Another beautiful write inspired by the stars and the challenge to sink or swim in weightlessness. Awesome imagery, Atakti!!
Another beautiful write inspired by the stars and the challenge to sink or swim in weightlessness. Awesome imagery, Atakti!!
14th Jan 2014 4:35pm
Ahhhh, could KILL you for that association on amber! haha
Seriously, was struggling there for a word to denote a warm feeling... never mind, I'll shut up...
Thanks so much for the comments and list add, Case.
:)
Seriously, was struggling there for a word to denote a warm feeling... never mind, I'll shut up...
Thanks so much for the comments and list add, Case.
:)
15th Jan 2014 10:03pm
I was referring to beer [amber ale]... I was feeling seedy.
unKILL me please. ;)
unKILL me please. ;)
14th Jan 2014 1:48am
14th Jan 2014 4:38pm
Thank you Cesar, for the 'art' comment. I'm happy to think my work managed to stimulate a reader's thoughts...
16th Jan 2014 5:18am
i can not swim as you've lifted me expansively floating in the synchronic pools, light reflecting from the surface, from the wonder and romantic background radiation of modern scientific glyphs and the ground of all being seeing eye sanskrit deep space roots of our earliest word expressed prayers of spirit...
16th Jan 2014 1:05pm
That's it, exactly...
Number one comment, of the week at least, serious contender for month! Thanks, Sem.
:)
Number one comment, of the week at least, serious contender for month! Thanks, Sem.
:)
