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Shallow dreams
I can't sleep well,
last night I was in a well asleep
your thoughts
like the encircled bricked walls
were surrounding me.
The boundaries squeezed
me when your watery trauma
dripped into my lungs as I drowned in my own afflictions
and I was laid in the hands of kama....
last night I was in a well asleep
your thoughts
like the encircled bricked walls
were surrounding me.
The boundaries squeezed
me when your watery trauma
dripped into my lungs as I drowned in my own afflictions
and I was laid in the hands of kama....
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Re: Shallow dreams
8th Jan 2014 12:51pm
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9th Jan 2014 4:09am
I don't exactly hear em ... its just a mild feeling , u know ..
anyways thank u for reading ...
anyways thank u for reading ...
Re: Shallow dreams
8th Jan 2014 8:29pm
...first two lines confused me. Xo
Your imagery was vivid because I could see the murky blurred walls of your dream crushing you...
Pen Love~
Your imagery was vivid because I could see the murky blurred walls of your dream crushing you...
Pen Love~
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re: Re: Shallow dreams
9th Jan 2014 4:12am
I was just trying to play with the meaning of 'well' there on the first two lines ...glad u found some color in something dark ... thank u so much rain ...
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