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A Lovers' Quarrel
It started with a misunderstanding,
They spent days babbling and bantering,
Silent treatments arise on occasion,
The Lovers' Quarrel held so much tension.
The recurring feuds are temperorary,
See lover's quarrels' are necessary.
The storm's short but filled irritant pain,
They know without love their minds are not sane.
The minds of lovers' are questionable,
As the heart aches, it's understandable.
Lover's whose hearts are filled with hatred,
Only leads them to be seperated.
They think; "lesson learned, there is no moral,"
Two hearts now one, after Lovers' quarrel.
They spent days babbling and bantering,
Silent treatments arise on occasion,
The Lovers' Quarrel held so much tension.
The recurring feuds are temperorary,
See lover's quarrels' are necessary.
The storm's short but filled irritant pain,
They know without love their minds are not sane.
The minds of lovers' are questionable,
As the heart aches, it's understandable.
Lover's whose hearts are filled with hatred,
Only leads them to be seperated.
They think; "lesson learned, there is no moral,"
Two hearts now one, after Lovers' quarrel.
Published 10th Feb 2011
| Edited 13th Apr 2011
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10th Feb 2011 4:16am
...you, the writer, not giving a shit about the reader.
Your title reads "A lover is quarrel"
And then you do it all through the piece...
they spent days is babbling...
see lover is quarrel is are necessary
the minds of lover is are questionable
....and on it goes. If you want to be read, make it readable.
And why the random capitals?
And who is 'they'...tell us about actual people, give us someone to care about, some feeling of life, a moment of insight...and we'll read it.
A sonnet is the highest (some say) form of the art of poetry, like making a beautiful chair is for a carpenter, but you are still learning to use nails...so guess what the table would look like...
Your title reads "A lover is quarrel"
And then you do it all through the piece...
they spent days is babbling...
see lover is quarrel is are necessary
the minds of lover is are questionable
....and on it goes. If you want to be read, make it readable.
And why the random capitals?
And who is 'they'...tell us about actual people, give us someone to care about, some feeling of life, a moment of insight...and we'll read it.
A sonnet is the highest (some say) form of the art of poetry, like making a beautiful chair is for a carpenter, but you are still learning to use nails...so guess what the table would look like...
Anonymous
10th Feb 2011 4:25am
I think the title is not "A Lover Is Quarrel" but the apostrophe implies possession, as well. As in the Quarrel of the Lover(s)...
10th Feb 2011 4:50am
mhm thanks. and yep i noticed i have a few mistakes thanks for telling me and i probably put a person to make it more interesting. thank you
10th Feb 2011 4:53am
Well i just needed a title and wasn't sure what to use so i just made some changes and made a lover's quarrel show up alot so it can make some kind of sense to me i guess...
