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18th Dec 2013 2:03am
18th Dec 2013 3:34am
18th Dec 2013 11:54am
There are some solid elements here ... you're right lovers can be greedy - starved for the attention and affection of the one they're with ... starved for it even to the point of wanting to give our heart ...
Note: haiku are nature based; you've written a senryu (writing that depicts human emotions)
Keep reading and writing
Note: haiku are nature based; you've written a senryu (writing that depicts human emotions)
Keep reading and writing
