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The Way You Make Me Feel
When I first laid eyes on you I knew that you would be the one the one that'll take me away and make all my dreams come true midnight could never hide it no mask could ever conceal it's out there for everyone to see the way you make me feel deep down inside I want you each breath I draw will reveal passion that sets my soul burning the way you make me feel when you look, and smile at me I get this warm feeling inside of me that makes me wanna give you all of me everything that my body is desired to give I love the way you make me feel when we are together I feel like nothing could go wrong you send my body into deep ecstasy and that makes me want you even more....
Published 4th Feb 2011
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4th Feb 2011 3:00am
4th Feb 2011 6:19pm
4th Feb 2011 3:03am
Remember your spaces and the capitals on 'Nothing', I'd personally take that out, other than that it works. Maybe another word to 'ecstasy' as well, since I've heard that used a lot.
4th Feb 2011 6:12pm
11th Mar 2011 3:09am
........Love this. Very descriptive to the point of almost being visual. : )
