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Bottled
Like glass I am shattered
My nerves are paper thin
Everything that doesn't matter
Is boiling beneath my skin
This anger that cripples
Tears my mind to shreds
My vision starts to ripple
The air in the room has fled
The monster of my thoughts
Turns it's eye to you
All this pain you have caused
Everything you put me through
My tongue is cut and bloody
Biting back on all the pain
You're nothing, a nobody
I say inside my brain
I crumple and I cower
Away from your black sun
You're smug as you glower
At all you have done
Published 7th Dec 2013
| Edited 11th Nov 2024
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8th Dec 2013 10:56pm
Really nice write there!
Love the wording!
Not sure if it is wanted but you might want to try to keep the metric until the end, it seems to flaw a little from "My tongue is..." onwards.
I really like it though ;)
I hope you are through that time! If not, I wish you my best.
God bless,
Easydrops
Love the wording!
Not sure if it is wanted but you might want to try to keep the metric until the end, it seems to flaw a little from "My tongue is..." onwards.
I really like it though ;)
I hope you are through that time! If not, I wish you my best.
God bless,
Easydrops
9th Dec 2013 4:24am
