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Love me Josh
Squeeze me tighter and make it stop
In a world of balance
Only I am lost
My walls are crumbling
The floor is gone
My heart is drenched in guilt
I fear my future, the Bitch's spawn
You fear my being withdrawn
I wish, I need
to be free
Hold me.
Help me to feel
Your blanket of love
It warms my soul;
is my compass when I am lost and alone
In a world of balance
Only I am lost
My walls are crumbling
The floor is gone
My heart is drenched in guilt
I fear my future, the Bitch's spawn
You fear my being withdrawn
I wish, I need
to be free
Hold me.
Help me to feel
Your blanket of love
It warms my soul;
is my compass when I am lost and alone
Published 31st Jan 2011
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31st Jan 2011 1:48pm
This is much, much better! It's personalized, it makes sense. I always describe my 'inner being' as an ashtray, I like the 'compass' idea. The use of the name aided this as well and your imagery was far more on point. This works well. Good job.
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