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End of Days
I will sit outside the front of my house and wait,
I shall have a large whiskey in one,
And a giant spliff in the other.
I will wait for the giant heat to hit me.
I shall move to my next life.
and scour at our governments decision.
To destroy the very beings who paid there wages.
long may i reign over my freedom.
as the earth is no ones ownership
it was here before me.
I shall have a large whiskey in one,
And a giant spliff in the other.
I will wait for the giant heat to hit me.
I shall move to my next life.
and scour at our governments decision.
To destroy the very beings who paid there wages.
long may i reign over my freedom.
as the earth is no ones ownership
it was here before me.
Published 25th Nov 2013
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25th Nov 2013 7:12pm
26th Nov 2013 7:07am
A few things I've noticed.
You say too much and mean too little, all you've practically done is set vague, in-cohesive images through poorly structured stanza format and lack of effective punctuation.
Learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an Artist. - A favourite quote of mine.
You say too much and mean too little, all you've practically done is set vague, in-cohesive images through poorly structured stanza format and lack of effective punctuation.
Learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an Artist. - A favourite quote of mine.
