The Colors of Touch

a good short poem ...

there are two kinda sensual feelings and both of em  have different colors .. I sense only one color here and that's passionate love...you painted a beautiful picture with just one color !
nice write tommy...
loved it...

keep writing..

cyanide...

I really like the idea here, would love to see you  build on it a little bit more. Since the colors are so much the focus of the piece, perhaps try using some more vivid ones other than red and orange, like you did with eggplant. I think if you did that, and took another look and your descriptors (hard body, tender touch) it would go a long way to making this piece sing.

e.g.


Satin cherry lipstick
stain,
smudged
on his firm flesh.


Keep up the good work, thanks for letting me read your piece! :-) Never stop improving.

I love oranges! :) I enjoy this piece, Tommie!

Its igniting

I love this...the title drew me right in :-)

Short and HOT sweets!!
Great write!!

Sir Lancelott






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These words are dripping with color and passion! My hard flesh could use a little red ;) Great poem Tommie

nicely done!

in a surreal way, you show movements & patterns of intimacy. sensations come in colors...