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p.o.w
eyes barely awakening,coughing choking in a pool of blood
lying on the floor body spread wide
is this the day that i died
the pain is excrutiating everypart of me feels numb,
you look to your left then quickly to the right
you cant see a fucking thing in sight,am i even awake or
is this the day that i died
suddenly i hear ruffling of feet on a gravelly floor
mumbling whispering walking by
is this the day that i died
a crash of metal and the dark explodes into a tunnel of light
surely this must be the day that i died
eyes squeezed so tight barely peeping through
two figures coming towards me but its to bright
is this the day that i died
gave up on all hope and life,its as if if two angels pick me up under the arms and head me towards the tunnel of light im not scared anymore
is this the day that i died
my eyes begin to focus i can feel my feet barely scraping along the gravelly floor
theres a tank in the distance no energy for resistance
but i can clearly make out my queens flag waving high
is this the day i died
no its the day that i survived
lying on the floor body spread wide
is this the day that i died
the pain is excrutiating everypart of me feels numb,
you look to your left then quickly to the right
you cant see a fucking thing in sight,am i even awake or
is this the day that i died
suddenly i hear ruffling of feet on a gravelly floor
mumbling whispering walking by
is this the day that i died
a crash of metal and the dark explodes into a tunnel of light
surely this must be the day that i died
eyes squeezed so tight barely peeping through
two figures coming towards me but its to bright
is this the day that i died
gave up on all hope and life,its as if if two angels pick me up under the arms and head me towards the tunnel of light im not scared anymore
is this the day that i died
my eyes begin to focus i can feel my feet barely scraping along the gravelly floor
theres a tank in the distance no energy for resistance
but i can clearly make out my queens flag waving high
is this the day i died
no its the day that i survived
Published 23rd Sep 2009
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23rd Sep 2009 11:06am
23rd Sep 2009 12:08pm
Your use of repetition is to die for! ;)
Grand poetry skills! The ending is amazing. Truly depicts the thoughts of someone near death, believeing with everything that they have left this world, and then finding out that they were alive. Gives a great feeling. I loved it! :)
Grand poetry skills! The ending is amazing. Truly depicts the thoughts of someone near death, believeing with everything that they have left this world, and then finding out that they were alive. Gives a great feeling. I loved it! :)
23rd Sep 2009 12:09pm
23rd Sep 2009 9:33pm
thanks for the comments,im glad to see some1 gets it the way i did,didnt have an ending till i wrote it and didnt know how it would be protrayed so its good you like it p.o.w means prisoner of war just imagined bein beaten and left for dead and at the end is were they come to rescue the troops ,thanks again for the comments,
16th Feb 2013 10:55am
