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Maybe
Maybe if I call you,
just one more time
it'll put it through my mind,
that you're the one I'm meant to be with.
Maybe if I tell you,
just one more secret
I'll feel like I trust you
Then I wont have to lie,
just maybe.. is it possible?
Maybe if I kiss you,
just one more time
I'll actually feel the spark,
that you always talk about.
Maybe, just maybe.
Maybe if I tell you
that I love you
enough times,
maybe.. just maybe
I'll start to believe my lies too.
yeah, probably not.[/font]
just one more time
it'll put it through my mind,
that you're the one I'm meant to be with.
Maybe if I tell you,
just one more secret
I'll feel like I trust you
Then I wont have to lie,
just maybe.. is it possible?
Maybe if I kiss you,
just one more time
I'll actually feel the spark,
that you always talk about.
Maybe, just maybe.
Maybe if I tell you
that I love you
enough times,
maybe.. just maybe
I'll start to believe my lies too.
yeah, probably not.[/font]
Published 21st Jan 2011
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21st Jan 2011 1:54am
It's a nice poem, slightly bland, a bit like pasta. It's a safe bet but you've got to put some herbs or sauce or cheese with it, something. I understand the concept and it's relatable but it's not as deep as it could be. It just seems almost a little spiteful but I like where you're going with it.
21st Jan 2011 8:43am
that's the word that comes first, like you don't particularly want to say this because you're trying to believe otherwise, so it almost fits the content in my opinion, it's apathetic, unsure. but i guarantee you don't need that last line to get the point across. the whole poem says it for you. if you feel like making it stand out, take L.A.'s advice because it could be more, but i think it doesn't have to be.
