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❄ Winter Paradise ❄
The reflection
of snow covered trees
rest calmly
on the icy pond.
A white wonderland
glittering peacefully,
like a blanket
covering the world.
Snowflakes,
shimmering like diamonds
as they gently float
from the grey clouds above.
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All of my poems are copyright of 2012 and 2013. No part of my poems are to be copied without my permission. Thank you!
of snow covered trees
rest calmly
on the icy pond.
A white wonderland
glittering peacefully,
like a blanket
covering the world.
Snowflakes,
shimmering like diamonds
as they gently float
from the grey clouds above.
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All of my poems are copyright of 2012 and 2013. No part of my poems are to be copied without my permission. Thank you!
Published 21st Oct 2013
| Edited 24th Oct 2013
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21st Oct 2013 7:43pm
21st Oct 2013 7:46pm
Thank you so much Gabi, I appreciate it and I'm gllad you enjoyed it. :)
21st Oct 2013 10:01pm
21st Oct 2013 10:10pm
22nd Oct 2013 2:53am
This is really good. The imagery you use is wonderful. The tone is perfect. Keep writing!:)
22nd Oct 2013 2:55am
24th Oct 2013 5:02am
sorry, but i don't get the diamond-like reference about the snowflakes in the last stanza. snow may glitter in the sun when it's on the ground and hard like ice, but i don't recall ever seeing falling snowflakes shimmer.
um..how is the snow that's on the ground glittering if there are grey clouds blocking the amount of sun necessary to produce the effect? i don't recall ever seeing snow on the ground glittering on a grey winter day. i'm not sure actually if there would be a reflection on a pond on a grey winter day. i've been to ponds, but can't remember whether the ice was ever reflecting or not--but i seem to remember it always being more frosted rather than mirror-like whenever i saw it frozen over. maybe you've seen otherwise.
um..how is the snow that's on the ground glittering if there are grey clouds blocking the amount of sun necessary to produce the effect? i don't recall ever seeing snow on the ground glittering on a grey winter day. i'm not sure actually if there would be a reflection on a pond on a grey winter day. i've been to ponds, but can't remember whether the ice was ever reflecting or not--but i seem to remember it always being more frosted rather than mirror-like whenever i saw it frozen over. maybe you've seen otherwise.
24th Oct 2013 2:07pm
Shimmer means twinkle and glitter, right? Diamonds shine and twinkle too so I just compared it.
How would the snow glitter if it's a grey winter day? Good question to ponder about. Maybe the grey clouds are thin enough for the sun to shine through and make the snow glitter? Maybe the snow glittered before the grey clouds came? And I've seen snow glitter in grey skies before. In a large area covered in 1+ feet of snow. So trust me it's possible! Same thing as an icy pond. If the ice is just right you can see a reflection on it, it's just like glass.
How would the snow glitter if it's a grey winter day? Good question to ponder about. Maybe the grey clouds are thin enough for the sun to shine through and make the snow glitter? Maybe the snow glittered before the grey clouds came? And I've seen snow glitter in grey skies before. In a large area covered in 1+ feet of snow. So trust me it's possible! Same thing as an icy pond. If the ice is just right you can see a reflection on it, it's just like glass.
24th Oct 2013 5:09am
yes, the imagery is beautiful and the tone is very approrpriate to the idea of "Winter Paradise," but i still think there may be too many glaring things that need to be reconsidered as i mentioned above.
24th Oct 2013 5:17am
about your copyright notice--your 2011 is missing a 1. anyway, it's really not necessary to post it, but you may have your reasons. um..i may still put little bits of your poems in quotation marks when commenting on them, yes?
24th Oct 2013 2:17pm
Just fixed that. I put a copyright because I worry about my poems, and because I literally did publish and got a copyright on all my poems.
Literally hundreds of people has read and reviewed my poems and copying does happen, I don't want it to happen to me. So I got them copyrighted.
Literally hundreds of people has read and reviewed my poems and copying does happen, I don't want it to happen to me. So I got them copyrighted.
