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🎃 The Jack-o'-Lantern 🎃
Orange and round,
glowing so bright
late on Halloween night.
Cursed by a candle
that shines so bright
through that smile
carved from a knife.
What is it thinking
behind those eyes
of glowing mystery?
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glowing so bright
late on Halloween night.
Cursed by a candle
that shines so bright
through that smile
carved from a knife.
What is it thinking
behind those eyes
of glowing mystery?
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All my poems are copyright of 2012 and 2013. No part of my poems are to be copied without my permission. Thank you!
Published 16th Oct 2013
| Edited 6th Nov 2013
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16th Oct 2013 8:45pm
16th Oct 2013 9:53pm
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17th Oct 2013 2:10pm
17th Oct 2013 6:49am
17th Oct 2013 2:11pm
A. it's not thinking anything.
B. how does a candle shining through it curse it in any way?
C. the smile was carved "with" a knife, not "from" a knife.
D. i really could not see a poem like this in a book of poems, unless it was among similarly-themed, or similarly-styled poems. its sort of primal, maybe immature rhyme and rhythm would have to go among similar pieces otherwise it would clash horribly, especially with the kind of style i've seen in many of the other poems i've read from you so far.
B. how does a candle shining through it curse it in any way?
C. the smile was carved "with" a knife, not "from" a knife.
D. i really could not see a poem like this in a book of poems, unless it was among similarly-themed, or similarly-styled poems. its sort of primal, maybe immature rhyme and rhythm would have to go among similar pieces otherwise it would clash horribly, especially with the kind of style i've seen in many of the other poems i've read from you so far.
