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Tired.
'Love,' I whisper.
'Time's not on our side.
Each second flies.'
I'm remembering the way you smile;
How fast the daylight dies.
'How would you feel
If I left
My head
With
You?
Just for a little while,
Just while I shut my eyes.'
'Time's not on our side.
Each second flies.'
I'm remembering the way you smile;
How fast the daylight dies.
'How would you feel
If I left
My head
With
You?
Just for a little while,
Just while I shut my eyes.'
Published 16th Jan 2011
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16th Jan 2011 7:56am
and this description, the only problem being (if i'm going to be all serious) that the lines "Time's not on our side." and "Each second flies" are both very often used in other poetry. I just think it might have more to it if you came up with another simple way to say those things. It does read so sweetly though, I felt it perfectly. [:
