deepundergroundpoetry.com
'Brittle Bones'
I am wise, yet far too dumb
I feel powerful, but so weak
So aloof, yet stilled, aplomb
I'm far down, but at my peak
Full of passion, I feel nothing
Seeping with give, want all I take
Calm as a whisper, livid if raked
I'm a portrait of access yet, with so much excess
I'm bound to break...plummeting into a wretched mess...
I feel powerful, but so weak
So aloof, yet stilled, aplomb
I'm far down, but at my peak
Full of passion, I feel nothing
Seeping with give, want all I take
Calm as a whisper, livid if raked
I'm a portrait of access yet, with so much excess
I'm bound to break...plummeting into a wretched mess...
Published 8th Oct 2013
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 11
reading list entries 1
comments 25
reads 946
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
Anonymous
8th Oct 2013 5:43pm
I feel such deep emotion in here-a near frantic sense of balance looking over the chaotic edge-but not too far
lovely write!
makes me think of a song called "up on a tight wire"
write on!
lovely write!
makes me think of a song called "up on a tight wire"
write on!
8th Oct 2013 5:46pm
Thank you my sweet one, hell lets just meet up a burn all
day, n laugh all night lol
Appreciate you so much! :)
day, n laugh all night lol
Appreciate you so much! :)
Anonymous
9th Oct 2013 2:52am
OMG! miki are you a Leon Russell fan?...ahhhhh! me too!
8th Oct 2013 6:04pm
Contrasting juxtapositions and powerful sentiments make this piece so amazing. I can feel it!
8th Oct 2013 7:13pm
8th Oct 2013 6:41pm
8th Oct 2013 7:14pm
I feel the sincerity of ur thoughts n that means so much to me...thank you so much my friend! :)
8th Oct 2013 7:05pm
8th Oct 2013 7:16pm
Wow lol not sure but I am sure that I love that!
lol... Thank you my sweetheart, you know how I feel :)
lol... Thank you my sweetheart, you know how I feel :)
8th Oct 2013 7:58pm
"I'm a portrait of access yet, with so much excess
I'm bound to break...plummeting into a wretched mess"
Wow this was overflowing with intense emotions..Soulfelt Scribe..I really enjoyed!!
I'm bound to break...plummeting into a wretched mess"
Wow this was overflowing with intense emotions..Soulfelt Scribe..I really enjoyed!!
9th Oct 2013 4:43am
Thank you my dear, you know how wonderful I think you are right? Big hugs I send to you n my undying gratitude as well ;)
8th Oct 2013 10:56pm
9th Oct 2013 4:45am
Thanks my dear bro! Always you give me motivation to keep on doing what I do, truly grateful I am for your support :)
9th Oct 2013 2:44am
9th Oct 2013 4:46am
Anonymous
9th Oct 2013 2:45am
Deep but yet humble, PIKM each line can stand on it's own, this is excellent poetry!
9th Oct 2013 4:47am
Coming from you that's a very big compliment
N I'm truly humbled n grateful for your support my sweetness :)
N I'm truly humbled n grateful for your support my sweetness :)
Anonymous
9th Oct 2013 2:58am
deep I agree, so much emotion in such calm. I can feel the nervous energy and the studied calm in every line..an amazing write Poetic..keep it coming
9th Oct 2013 4:49am
nopoetiknow, I thank you for your gracious n kind thoughts
On my ink... Appreciate that so much n I look forward
to reading u as soon as possible :)
On my ink... Appreciate that so much n I look forward
to reading u as soon as possible :)
Anonymous
10th Oct 2013 3:12am
Concise but complete
A neat little poem
Says much with few words
Peace and x0
Kitty
A neat little poem
Says much with few words
Peace and x0
Kitty
10th Oct 2013 10:53am
12th Oct 2013 4:35am
I sunk deep into this from the moment I started reading it. Really pulled me in. Powerful ink, enjoyed it, as I do all your work my brother.
12th Oct 2013 5:25am
Aaawww thank you my dear brotha, I'm happy it was enjoyable for you, n as always I'm grateful for your support :)
Anonymous
12th Oct 2013 1:20pm
Powerful write Mr PM ... I think we can all relate.
12th Oct 2013 1:32pm
Thank you my dear, I hope some haven't ever had to deal with it to be honest, but yea I'm sure you're right n I'm just hopelessly hopeful... Grateful to you always :)
