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Fuck the government
Why does this happen,
The internal anger is killing me,
Fuck the government one of my friends always says,
But he's fucking dead right.
(This is not a protest, this is the fucking truth)
The internal anger is killing me,
Fuck the government one of my friends always says,
But he's fucking dead right.
(This is not a protest, this is the fucking truth)
Published 12th Jan 2011
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13th Jan 2011 9:43pm
Well...I'd like it longer, like you to tell us why you are angry, because we don't know.
Also, the word "internal" is maybe not required, as all anger is internal, something we feel.
How about, when in that mood, banging out the whole rant, the thought train of the anger and what it is doing...we'll love it.
Also, the word "internal" is maybe not required, as all anger is internal, something we feel.
How about, when in that mood, banging out the whole rant, the thought train of the anger and what it is doing...we'll love it.
13th Jan 2011 10:25pm
thanks, i only make up poems when i'm in bed and can't sleep and i don't edit my work really because it doesn't feel right to me, it feels guilty somehow
6th Jul 2011 4:06am
well get over the not editing phobia because very few of us "get it right the first time".
6th Jul 2011 4:07am
