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Dream Awake, Reality I Ache
Baby, baby if I seem egotistical
it is only your first mistaken glance
when that choice is made of partners
it is always you with whom I want to dance
Wanting you to scribe your attraction
simply serves to tell me this is real
that even the total capture of my heart
isn't a wound from which I want to heal
Could this be illusory directives
wrangled and wrapped in directives of the mind
waking to solitary confinement
reality left so far behind
So if I seem rather uncertain
it is only in my quest to find what's true
that central to my path journey
is the treasure of my knowing you
it is only your first mistaken glance
when that choice is made of partners
it is always you with whom I want to dance
Wanting you to scribe your attraction
simply serves to tell me this is real
that even the total capture of my heart
isn't a wound from which I want to heal
Could this be illusory directives
wrangled and wrapped in directives of the mind
waking to solitary confinement
reality left so far behind
So if I seem rather uncertain
it is only in my quest to find what's true
that central to my path journey
is the treasure of my knowing you
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Re: Dream Awake, Reality I Ache
26th Sep 2013 11:54pm
Oh jazz this is lovely. So gentle and filled with an honest tongue and mind. Good luck :). Syn
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re: Re: Dream Awake, Reality I Ache
27th Sep 2013 00:00am
Thanks... it was intended to convey just a bit depth and not be syrup laden.
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27th Sep 2013 00:02am
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27th Sep 2013 00:04am
How can a guy not smile when a writer who happens to be cute appreciates your pen? Thanks for loaning me your eyes.
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Anonymous
27th Sep 2013 00:03am
Beautiful and so honestly portrayed, its the journey and the journey itself will have many bumps, curves and storms.
Very nice Mr. Jazz.
Very nice Mr. Jazz.
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27th Sep 2013 00:06am
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Anonymous
27th Sep 2013 1:27am
This is very sweet and lovely....
Enjoyed
Kitty
Enjoyed
Kitty
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Anonymous
28th Sep 2013 2:11am
No...but gosh this is creepy....two of the men in my life actually liked Neil Diamond....eeeek
no, not Neil Diamond.....
no, not Neil Diamond.....
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Re: Dream Awake, Reality I Ache
Anonymous
27th Sep 2013 1:57am
Those first steps to knowing are always tentative. Wonderful expression here.
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27th Sep 2013 7:35am
This was really beautifully written I enjoyed every word in it a d it was very inspiring your an amazing poet
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Re: Dream Awake, Reality I Ache
29th Sep 2013 3:06am
beautiful, beautiful write! enjoyed very much. you have such a way with words!
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