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Battle!!
Battle!!
And on this day,
I write.
Stories of epic proportions
Unfold before us,
Upon a battlefield unseen,
Duly noted in blood..
From deep within the mind,
Not of this physical realm,
A revolutionary evolution takes place,
As spiritual beings trapped within
The fleshy confines of man
Become recognized...
Intricate B
And on this day,
I write.
Stories of epic proportions
Unfold before us,
Upon a battlefield unseen,
Duly noted in blood..
From deep within the mind,
Not of this physical realm,
A revolutionary evolution takes place,
As spiritual beings trapped within
The fleshy confines of man
Become recognized...
Intricate B
Published 25th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
29th Sep 2013 4:01am
Some very interesting ideas are elegantly conveyed here. My one nitpick would be that it's too vague; your writing is good enough that I want more. I want to learn about these trapped spiritual beings and unseen battlefield. You have a clarity of thought which is refreshing; join it up with a narrative and more specific images and you could have a great poem. JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read.
3rd Oct 2013 12:33pm
