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Gone too soon...
It took
just twenty four hours
for freedom to begin
she searched everywhere
for someone to love
around every bend
never finding what was needed
to nourish within
as yet another life falls silent,
when at only 22, she met her end
found dangling
by phone cord in bathroom,
as time kept on ticking
sadly, she never knew
nor had the knowledge
n' feelings of love from birth
so how can one contend?
such a sad reality, it shakes the mind,
as the heart's quickly breaking...
now, praying you are at least
in peace from pain finally...
I say goodbye to you now my friend...
just twenty four hours
for freedom to begin
she searched everywhere
for someone to love
around every bend
never finding what was needed
to nourish within
as yet another life falls silent,
when at only 22, she met her end
found dangling
by phone cord in bathroom,
as time kept on ticking
sadly, she never knew
nor had the knowledge
n' feelings of love from birth
so how can one contend?
such a sad reality, it shakes the mind,
as the heart's quickly breaking...
now, praying you are at least
in peace from pain finally...
I say goodbye to you now my friend...
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Re: Gone too soon...
Anonymous
17th Sep 2013 9:34pm
Felt this heartbreakingly sad write, Poetikmind. I'm sorry for the loss of your friend under such harsh circumstances. Thank you for sharing your heartfelt words!
Peace
Carlene
Peace
Carlene
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17th Sep 2013 9:39pm
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17th Sep 2013 11:06pm
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18th Sep 2013 00:42am
Yea thanks bro. It did leave me sad
n I hope she's in a better, happier place now
Thanks for ur kindness bro.
n I hope she's in a better, happier place now
Thanks for ur kindness bro.
Re: Gone too soon...
17th Sep 2013 11:41pm
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18th Sep 2013 00:44am
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18th Sep 2013 00:47am
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18th Sep 2013 00:51am
Aaaaawwwww... I thank you for this sweet comment
N will return the favor as soon as you have something posted :)
N will return the favor as soon as you have something posted :)
Re: Gone too soon...
18th Sep 2013 3:13am
Okay, how can you make me cry of sadness, make my heart smile of love and make me wanna have ink babies with your stinger in my honey-inkwell, all in the past 24 hours?!
Gifted I tell ya! Xo
Gifted I tell ya! Xo
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re: Re: Gone too soon...
18th Sep 2013 3:35am
...and never will I make light of ink this emotional. Trust and believe my heart fluttered while reading this!
Again, gifted I tell ya! Xo
Again, gifted I tell ya! Xo
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18th Sep 2013 5:26am
My sweet sweet Rain, I never ever would think you would make light of this, no worries... As for how I did those things to you, I'm deeply flattered n honored... I thank n adore you to pieces lady :)
Re: Gone too soon...
Anonymous
18th Sep 2013 3:29am
This is beautiful and sad. PIKM you've done an outstanding job commemorating your friend, i'm sure she's watching over you with love.
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re: Re: Gone too soon...
18th Sep 2013 5:28am
Thank you Vee, ur so sweet n I'm sure you're right, I just want her to be at peace now. Grateful to you always :)
Re: Gone too soon...
18th Sep 2013 9:20am
A very poignant write and young loss I am too familiar with.
A heavy heart write Poetikmind, wonderfully written.
A heavy heart write Poetikmind, wonderfully written.
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re: Re: Gone too soon...
18th Sep 2013 11:30am
Yes, I imagine alot of people can relate to this
which is even sadder...thank you my sweetness, appreciate
you always :)
which is even sadder...thank you my sweetness, appreciate
you always :)
Re: Gone too soon...
The end of a hardly started life is always heartbreaking and sad. My thoughts go to you.
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re: Re: Gone too soon...
18th Sep 2013 8:26pm
Thank h my friend, it was a very hard existence for her
N honestly there wasn't anything I could've done to alter the outcome, although I truly wish I could've... Truly thank u for your thoughts n support :)
N honestly there wasn't anything I could've done to alter the outcome, although I truly wish I could've... Truly thank u for your thoughts n support :)